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Many college students will get homesick when they are away from home. What do you think they can do in order to deal with their homesickness? Please include specific reasons and examples in your response. v.1

Many college students will get homesick when they are away from home. What do you think they can do in order to deal with their homesickness? Please include specific reasons and examples in your response. v. 1
Children who are the future generation of the country grow the way they have been taught so. Nowadays, there have been more pressure on kids to get good marks and not bother about any other extracurricular activities. Personally, I do oppose it and it will not create a good environment for the future generation. To begin with I would like to emphasise on team working skills and cooperation among the young ones. It is important to build a social life with one another in the society growing up and developing these skills right form the play school helps them a lot. No soul can live alone without the support from others in this age. Besides, there are zero instances this information had been recorded. On the other hand, being competitive in school is good, but it should not be forced onto the kids. For example, there have been many instances wherein even without ample knowledge or basic education we have seen people succeed in their lives and are in top position now around the globe. Furthermore, I believe that education is not only one way to get success. Finally, I would like to conclude that apart from the academic skills other interpersonal skills should be important as a result, the government should seek thought it and have it implemented right from grade one in each and every school. Hence, skills are more compared to academics and let the bright youngster's live their live they want to do so.
Children who are the future generation of the country grow the way they have
been taught
so
. Nowadays, there have been more pressure on kids to
get
good
marks and not bother about any
other
extracurricular activities.
Personally
, I do oppose it and it will not create a
good
environment for the future generation.

To
begin
with I would like to
emphasise
on team working
skills
and cooperation among the young ones. It is
important
to build a social life with one another in the society growing up and developing these
skills
right form the play school
helps
them a lot. No soul can
live
alone without the support from others in this age.
Besides
, there are zero instances this information had
been recorded
.

On the
other
hand, being competitive in school is
good
,
but
it should not
be forced
onto the kids.
For example
, there have been
many
instances wherein even without ample knowledge or basic education we have
seen
people
succeed in their
lives
and are in top position
now
around the globe.
Furthermore
, I believe that education is not
only
one way to
get
success.

Finally
, I would like
to conclude
that apart from the academic
skills
other
interpersonal
skills
should be
important
as a result
, the
government
should seek
thought
it and have it implemented right from grade one in each and every school.
Hence
,
skills
are more compared to academics and
let
the bright youngster's
live
their
live
they want to do
so
.
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IELTS essay Many college students will get homesick when they are away from home. What do you think they can do in order to deal with their homesickness? Please include specific reasons and examples in your response. v. 1

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  American English
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248 words
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