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It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.5

It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents. v. 5
College life is one of the best life where you can learn lots of things which help you further in life. It is commonly believed that is essential for high school students to live outside their parental habitations. I strongly believe in this argument. This essay further discusses the idea of independence living briefly and identify how maturity will increase or decrease. On one hand, college students who are largely isolated, learn some positive social values when they are started living outside their parent scope. Firstly, students are able to socialize with other fellows from different backgrounds; hence, they adopt some positive social values, their customs and traditions which help them in near future. In addition, they will be able to deal with all of their problems especially financial issues efficiently. For instance, one student who visit abroad and it only have a certain amount as a living allowance, so it will learn how to live independently outside their comfort zone with limited resources. On the contrary, the potential set-backs are not so far. To begin with, student lose their focus on studies when there are living in their dormitories. To further explain, students who living outside their parents watch hardly concentrate due to low moral support. This form of lure is usually augmented by their peers, who are almost there to help, and also guide them in every aspects therefore, they are easily convinced. For example, one of my friends who go abroad for study has a nervous breakdown due to no moral support. There is no one for its guidance and assure him at the time of high pressure due to studies. In the absence of parental support, most students lose self-esteem since they need this form of support to study effectively. In conclusion, their intercultural ethical maturity, high school student gain outside their parental home; nevertheless, there may be a devastating impact on the student's attention to studies as well as the overall moral to learn.
College life is one of the best life where you can
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learn
lots of things which
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help
you
further
in life. It is
commonly
believed
that is
essential for high school
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students
to
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live
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outside
their parental habitations. I
strongly
believe in this argument. This essay
further
discusses the
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idea
of independence
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living
briefly
and identify how maturity will increase or decrease.

On one hand, college
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students
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who
are
largely
isolated,
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learn
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some
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positive
social values when they are
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started
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living
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outside
their parent scope.
Firstly
,
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students
are able to socialize with other fellows from
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different
backgrounds;
hence
, they adopt
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some
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positive
social values, their customs and traditions which
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help
them in near future.
In addition
, they will be able to deal with all of their problems
especially
financial issues
efficiently
.
For instance
, one
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student
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who
visit abroad and it
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only
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have
a certain amount as a
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living
allowance,
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so
it will
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learn
how to
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live
independently
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outside
their comfort zone with limited resources.

On the contrary
, the potential set-backs are not
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so
far. To
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begin
with,
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student
lose their focus on
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studies
when there are
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living
in their dormitories. To
further
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explain
,
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students
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who
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living
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outside
their parents
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watch
hardly concentrate due to low moral
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support
. This form of lure is
usually
augmented by their peers,
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who
are almost there to
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help
, and
also
guide them in every
The noun should be probably in the singular form: "aspect"?
aspects
therefore
, they are
easily
convinced.
For example
, one of my friends
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who
go abroad for
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study
has a nervous breakdown due to no moral
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support
. There is no one for its guidance and assure him at the time of high pressure due to
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studies
. In the absence of parental
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support
, most
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students
lose self-esteem since they need this form of
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support
to
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study
effectively
.

In conclusion
, their intercultural ethical maturity, high school
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student
gain
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outside
their parental home;
nevertheless
, there may be a devastating impact on the student's attention to
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studies
as well
as the
overall
moral to
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learn
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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