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Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunize their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunize their children? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.7

Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunize their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunize their children? v. 7
With the advent of vaccines, it is now possible to prevent several dreaded diseases which are very common in children and cause a lot of morbidities, and sometimes mortality. However, the question arises as to whether vaccination should be made mandatory for all children in order to protect them from these diseases or should it be a voluntary decision of the parents. This essay will try to analyse both these views and come to a feasible conclusion. On the one hand, it is true that compulsory immunization of all children against a disease will prevent the perpetuation of the causative agent and will eventually eradicate the disease from the society. Moreover, prevention is better than cure and therefore it is both economical and socially beneficial to vaccinate the children, which in turn, will eventually lead to a healthy society with a decreased burden of a disease. For instance, in the early twentieth century, Small Pox was a dreaded disease among children, which lead to severe disfigurement and loss of hearing. With nationalised government aided compulsory Small Pox vaccination programme, the disease has been eradicated from this planet. The same idea holds promise for the eradication of Polio too. Even if a single will strain of Polio exists in the environment, there is a chance of Polio infection, which will sell the National Polio Eradication Programme of India. Hence it is essential that all children are compulsorily immunized against polio. On the other hand, it cannot be refuted that sometimes vaccines may have potential harmful effects on the human body, which may lead to a more severely ill effect in children than the disease itself. Parents do have the right to know these ill effects before being convinced into immunising their children. For example, in the initial stages of Pulse Polio Programme, there were a few sporadic cases of paralysis reported after taking the vaccination. Another argument against compulsory vaccination is that it violates the concept of natural or innate immunity against several bacteria and viruses. Considering both points of view, it is evident that the law enforced vaccination of children has several long-lasting benefits of the society which clearly outweigh the disadvantages. Therefore, it should be made compulsory by law to immunize children in order to build a better, less burdened, and disease free society.
With the advent of vaccines, it is
now
possible to
prevent
several dreaded
diseases
which are
very
common in
children
and cause
a lot of
morbidities
, and
sometimes
mortality.
However
, the question arises
as to whether
vaccination should
be made
mandatory for all
children
in order to protect them from these
diseases
or should it be a voluntary decision of the parents. This essay will try to
analyse
both these views and
come
to a feasible conclusion.

On the one hand, it is true that
compulsory
immunization of all
children
against a
disease
will
prevent
the perpetuation of the causative agent and will
eventually
eradicate the
disease
from the
society
.
Moreover
, prevention is better than cure and
therefore
it is both economical and
socially
beneficial to vaccinate the
children
, which in turn, will
eventually
lead to a healthy
society
with a decreased burden of a
disease
.
For instance
, in the early twentieth century,
Small
Pox was a dreaded
disease
among
children
, which lead to severe disfigurement and loss of hearing. With
nationalised
government
aided
compulsory
Small
Pox vaccination
programme
, the
disease
has
been eradicated
from this planet. The same
idea
holds promise for the eradication of Polio too. Even if a single will strain of Polio exists in the environment, there is a chance of Polio infection, which will sell the National Polio Eradication
Programme
of India.
Hence
it is essential that all
children
are
compulsorily
immunized against polio.

On the other hand
, it cannot
be refuted
that
sometimes
vaccines may have potential harmful effects on the human body, which may lead to a more
severely
ill effect in
children
than the
disease
itself. Parents do have the right to know these ill effects
before
being convinced
into
immunising
their
children
.
For example
, in the initial stages of Pulse Polio
Programme
, there were a few sporadic cases of paralysis reported after taking the vaccination. Another argument against
compulsory
vaccination is that it violates the concept of natural or innate immunity against several bacteria and viruses.

Considering both points of view, it is evident that the law enforced vaccination of
children
has several long-lasting benefits of the
society
which
clearly
outweigh the disadvantages.
Therefore
, it should
be made
compulsory
by law to immunize
children
in order to build a better, less burdened, and
disease
free
society
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunize their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunize their children? v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
385 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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