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Many businesses find it very difficult to assign enough time and resources to research and development. What could a government do to encourage more company spending in this area? v.4

Many businesses find it very difficult to assign enough time and resources to research and development. What could a government do to encourage more company spending in this area? v. 4
I strongly agree with the statement that research and progress cannot be flourished just by the individual efforts of private sector companies without enough support and cooperation of governments. Almost all the reputed companies fix some budget for research and development of their products but personal or company's interests put aside the common and noble cause of research due to short of resources. Governments need their part to play to promote the culture of research going side by side with companies for the common cause of development. There are lots of measures which government can do.   But I share with you here, some options in my mind. For example, some government organisations can be established to create an environment of trust and security among people and companies to monitor and regulate the process of research such as Federal development authority, Ministry of health sciences etc. Moreover, funding resources should be provided to companies, researchers and even students of universities who are working on valuable research areas for the noble cause of humanity.   A committee can be made to review the projects submitted and pass them on to the selection procedure. The selected candidates should be awarded funds or scholarships for their projects to complete within the fixed period of time. I quote you here my own example, being working as research scientist in a cancer hospital. One of my projects is still in the papers due to the limited supply of funds. To sum up my talk, I would like to say that governments, especially of undeveloped countries have to take some measures to support and promote the culture of research in private sector companies and community. Otherwise, we will lose the cream of our young minds and their life-changing abilities by spoiling their ideas and frustrating their minds.
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with the statement that
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and progress cannot
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just
by the individual efforts of private sector
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companies
without
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enough
support and cooperation of
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governments
. Almost all the reputed
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companies
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fix
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some
budget for
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research
and development of their products
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but
personal or
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company
's interests put aside the common and noble cause of
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research
due to short of resources.
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Governments
need their part to play to promote the culture of
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research
going side by side with
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companies
for the common cause of development. There are lots of measures which
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government
can do.
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But
I share with you here,
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some
options in my mind.

For example
,
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some
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organisations
can
be established
to create an environment of trust and security among
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people
and
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companies
to monitor and regulate the process of
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research
such as Federal development authority, Ministry of health sciences etc.

Moreover
, funding resources should
be provided
to
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companies
, researchers and even students of universities who are working on valuable
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research
areas for the noble cause of humanity.
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A committee can
be made
to review the projects submitted and pass them on to the selection procedure. The selected candidates should
be awarded
funds or scholarships for their projects to complete within the
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fixed
period of time. I quote you here my
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own
example, being working as
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research
scientist in a cancer hospital. One of my projects is
still
in the papers due to the limited supply of funds.

To sum up my talk, I would like to say that
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governments
,
especially
of undeveloped countries
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have to
take
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some
measures to support and promote the culture of
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research
in private sector
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companies
and community.
Otherwise
, we will lose the cream of our young minds and their life-changing abilities by spoiling their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
and frustrating their minds.
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IELTS essay Many businesses find it very difficult to assign enough time and resources to research and development. What could a government do to encourage more company spending in this area? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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