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Many businesses find it very difficult to assign enough time and resources to research and development. What could a government do to encourage more company spending in this area? v.2

Many businesses find it very difficult to assign enough time and resources to research and development. What could a government do to encourage more company spending in this area? v. 2
Competition has increased to a greater extent between various organisations. This has forced most of the firms to only concentrate on profits rather than innovations. However, lack of explorations has impacted the growth of the country's economy. In this essay, we will analyse how ruling party can motivate co-operations to invest in the analysis of old products and improve them. To begin with, the political authority can declare some benefits for those industries which have modified the existing systems for their better performance. For instance, elected group can provide some concessions on the mortgage interest rate for the firms releasing modified merchandises. Evidently, Company will put full efforts on experimenting old product and creating its better version. Thus, it is apparent that this will inspire associations to venture in redeveloping existing applications. In addition to this, the administration can provide few dedicated staff members for the purpose of creating new better systems from the existing one. A good illustration for this is the group of employees who will be employed on government's payroll but will work for the other companies. In other words, the only aim of these special employees will be improving systems by performing some tests on them. Hence, Company will be able to focus on upgrading applications without compensating their regular profits. In conclusion, the government can play a vital role in influencing organisations to uplift older systems. What this means is government can provoke industries by offering them lower loan interest rates and committed workforce which will help to boost countries economy. It is thus hoped that ruling parties will implement some measures for instigating company to get involved in new inventions.
Competition has increased to a greater extent between various
Possible spelling mistake. 'organisations' is British English.
organisations
. This has forced most of the firms to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
concentrate on profits
rather
than innovations.
However
, lack of explorations has impacted the growth of the country's economy. In this essay, we will
Possible spelling mistake. 'analyse' is British English.
analyse
how ruling party can motivate co-operations to invest in the analysis of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
products and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
them.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, the political authority can declare
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
benefits for those industries which have modified the existing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
systems
for their better performance.
For instance
, elected group can provide
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
concessions on the mortgage interest rate for the firms releasing modified merchandises.
Evidently
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Company
will put full efforts on experimenting
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
product and creating its better version.
Thus
, it is apparent that this will inspire associations to venture in redeveloping existing applications.

In addition
to this, the administration can provide few dedicated staff members for the purpose of creating new better
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
systems
from the existing one. A
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
illustration for this is the group of employees who will
be employed
on
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
's payroll
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
will work for the other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
.
In other words
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
aim of these special employees will be improving
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
systems
by performing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tests
on them.
Hence
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Company
will be able to focus on upgrading applications without compensating their regular profits.

In conclusion
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can play a vital role in influencing
Possible spelling mistake. 'organisations' is British English.
organisations
to uplift older
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
systems
. What this means is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can provoke industries by offering them lower loan interest rates and committed workforce which will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to boost countries economy. It is
thus
hoped that ruling parties will implement
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
measures for instigating
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
company
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
involved in new inventions.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Many businesses find it very difficult to assign enough time and resources to research and development. What could a government do to encourage more company spending in this area? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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