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Many animals species are becoming extinct as a result of human activities. What are the causes an possible solutions to this problem. v.1

Many animals species are becoming extinct as a result of human activities. What are the causes an possible solutions to this problem. v. 1
Excessive human intervention in nature's activity has led to extinction of certain animals. This essay will discuss the reasons including Hunting and Forest fire. This essay will also suggest solution as serious criminal charges on hunting and alternative methods for saving them from fire. Some of the animal has gone extinct because of public mis-management. The greatest example of this the amazon fire which in just 2 days time eradicated many species which took shelter that forest. These fire are often from a small cigratte or a match stick which is used by humans. This was not the only fire which took, there has been many such as calfornia fire, fire in africa. Secondly, hunting has been always a prominent reason for species going extinct. Hunting only happens for those animals who are rare and are having good prices in the market for their skin or teeth or medicinal. A research has been done of nearly extinction of fish, we are hugely hunting fishes for feeding or medicinal purpose and they are not growing at the same rate as we are hunting them. Thus, Hunting and forest fires have majorly responsible for mass eradication of animals because of humans. Increasing extinction in animals due to human activities is a reason for worrysome. Though it is not too late and we can work upon the solutions and save our animal kingdom. If the government can have criminal charges levy on the person hunting the animals, it would retain people from doing it. Certain countries like India, Bangaldesh they have banned hunting and made punishment very severe. Secondly, we should have a proper disaster management team in place for such big fire, we should have an animal evaucation team in place for this. In these recent fire, it was evident that we were more curious to save humans than any other species. Therefore, making the hunting a global offence and having a reliable team to support in case of the fire can save us from mass eradication. In conclusion, evidently humans are the main reason of death of many animals. This essay discussed the causes largely summarised as hunting and forest blaze. This essay also suggested solution to make hunting illegal and banning the citizen from doing it, and to have a back up team for evacuation of animals stuck in such fire.
Excessive
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human
intervention in nature's activity has led to extinction of certain
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animals
. This
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essay
will discuss the
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reasons
including
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Hunting
and
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Forest
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fire
. This
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essay
will
also
suggest solution as serious criminal charges on
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hunting
and alternative methods for saving them from fire.

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Some of the
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animal
has gone extinct
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because
of public
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mis-management
. The greatest example of this the
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amazon
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fire
which in
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just
2 days time eradicated
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many
species which took shelter that
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forest
. These
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fire
are
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often
from a
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small
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cigratte
or a match stick which is
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used
by
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humans
. This was not the
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only
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fire
which took, there has been
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many
such as
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calfornia
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fire
,
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fire
in
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africa
.
Secondly
,
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hunting
has been always a prominent
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reason
for species going extinct.
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Hunting
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only
happens for those
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animals
who are rare and are having
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good
prices in the market for their skin or teeth or medicinal.
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has
been done
of
nearly
extinction of fish, we are
hugely
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hunting
fishes for feeding or medicinal
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purpose and
they are not growing at the same rate as we are
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hunting
them.
Thus
,
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Hunting
and
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forest
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fires
have
majorly
responsible for mass eradication of
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animals
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because
of humans.

Increasing extinction in
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animals
due to
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human
activities is a
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reason
for
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worrysome
. Though it is not too
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late and
we can work upon the solutions and save our
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animal
kingdom. If the
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government
can have criminal charges levy on the person
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hunting
the
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animals
, it would retain
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people
from doing it. Certain countries like India,
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Bangaldesh
they have banned
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hunting
and made punishment
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very
severe.
Secondly
, we should have a proper disaster management
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team
in place for such
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big
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fire
, we should have an
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animal
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evaucation
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team
in place for this. In these recent
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fire
, it was evident that we were more curious to save
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humans
than any other species.
Therefore
, making the
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hunting
a global
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offence
and having a reliable
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team
to support in case of the
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fire
can save us from mass eradication.

In conclusion
,
evidently
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humans
are the main
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reason
of death of
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many
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animals
. This
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essay
discussed the causes
largely
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summarised
as
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hunting
and
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forest
blaze. This
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essay
also
suggested solution to
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make
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hunting
illegal and banning the citizen from doing it, and to have a back up
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team
for evacuation of
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animals
stuck in such
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fire
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
54Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Mistakes

IELTS essay Many animals species are becoming extinct as a result of human activities. What are the causes an possible solutions to this problem. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
391 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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