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Many animals are facing extinction in the wild. Why is this happening? What can be done to protect them? v.2

It's undoubtedly true that today's numerous of animals are being exterminated. However, in this essay I will discuss some reasons behind this. First and foremost, without any doubt a huge number of animals have been extinction in various countries because mostly countries make various sort of medicines through animals that are utilise to human life's. Secondly, scientist to create new medicine they use various parts of animals in laboratory to discover cure. The last but not the least, mostly people kill to eat animals for example, in china there animals rate have been decreased because they frequently use animals in their daily lives for several purposes. In addition, there are also other reasons which cause of animals extinction as that there are many predators that are pursuiting of hunt everyday huge number of wild animals they hunt. There are a number of measures that can be helpful in reducing the animals extermination. Let's begin with the government they should have to make a number of regulations for saving animals life's. First, they implement strict punish on those people that hunt to animals. Secondly, the government make such places where animals can keep, and where they can live a peaceful life as well as provide such habitation where all environment contain natural things, and where they can safe from storms. To sum up, in light of the fact that now animals can't live safely. Therefore, government should have to take action immediately so that animals can be safe from extinction.
It's
undoubtedly
true that
today
's numerous of
animals
are
being exterminated
.
However
, in this essay I will discuss
some
reasons behind this.

First
and foremost, without any doubt a huge
number
of
animals
have been extinction in various countries
because
mostly
countries
make
various sort of medicines through
animals
that are
utilise
to human life's.
Secondly
, scientist to create new medicine they
use
various parts of
animals
in laboratory to discover cure. The last
but
not the least,
mostly
people
kill to eat
animals
for example
, in
china
there
animals
rate have
been decreased
because
they
frequently
use
animals
in their daily
lives
for several purposes.

In addition
, there are
also
other reasons which cause of
animals
extinction as that there are
many
predators that are
pursuiting
of hunt everyday huge
number
of wild
animals
they hunt. There are a
number
of measures that can be helpful in reducing the
animals
extermination.

Let
's
begin
with the
government
they should
have to
make
a
number
of regulations for saving
animals
life's.
First
, they implement strict punish on those
people
that hunt to
animals
.
Secondly
, the
government
make
such places where
animals
can
keep
, and where they can
live
a peaceful life
as well
as provide such habitation where all environment
contain
natural things, and where they can
safe
from storms.

To sum up, in light of the fact that
now
animals
can't
live
safely
.
Therefore
,
government
should
have to
take action immediately
so
that
animals
can be safe from extinction.
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IELTS essay Many animals are facing extinction in the wild. Why is this happening? What can be done to protect them?

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