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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since there is computer technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since there is computer technology. v. 3
Some people argued that computer technology are more and more developing so investing budget in maintain public libraries is not necessary. While I agree that computer plays an essential role in human’s life, I am more convinced that public libraries should be maintained. I accept that there are several reasons why computer technology is highly benefits for human. Firstly, people could easy to access information by computer or laptop. With a computer connected to the internet, readers could find any free books or information in few minutes. They would not waste time to find out a book which they need on selves. Another reason is that people who keen on reading books also save their budget by reading books on the internet by their computer. Instead of an enormous amount of money devoted to buying books, they could invest in other demands such as clothes or domestic shopping. However, I am firmly of the opinion that public libraries should be maintained for some reasons below. One of the most significant reasons is that it is the place which people could relieve stress after a long week study or work hard. This is because the atmosphere at almost all libraries also quite so readers could enjoy their books without bothering about engine or traffic noise. By this way, they also practice concentrating ability which is extremely important with people work white – collar jobs. In conclusion, while I believed that computer technology brings about positive impacts on readers, I am more convinced that public libraries should be maintained.
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Some
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people
argued that computer technology are more and more developing
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so
investing budget in maintain
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public
libraries is not necessary. While I
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agree
that computer plays an essential role in human’s life, I am more convinced that
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public
libraries should
be maintained
.

I accept that there are several
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reasons
why computer technology is
highly
benefits for human.
Firstly
,
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people
could easy to access information by computer or laptop. With a computer connected to the internet, readers could find any free
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books
or information in few minutes. They would not waste time to find out a
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book
which they need on selves. Another
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reason
is that
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people
who keen on reading
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books
also
save their budget by reading
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books
on the internet by their computer.
Instead
of an enormous amount of money devoted to buying
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books
, they could invest in other demands such as clothes or domestic shopping.

However
, I am
firmly
of the opinion that
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public
libraries should
be maintained
for
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some
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reasons
below. One of the most significant
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reasons
is that it is the place which
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people
could relieve
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stress
after a long week study or work
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hard
. This is
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because
the atmosphere at almost all libraries
also
quite
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so
readers could enjoy their
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books
without bothering about engine or traffic noise. By this way, they
also
practice concentrating ability which is
extremely
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important
with
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people
work white
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–
collar jobs.

In conclusion
, while I believed that computer technology brings about
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positive
impacts on readers, I am more convinced that
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public
libraries should
be maintained
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since there is computer technology. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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