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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.4

Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions. v. 4
There is a strong argument from some people that government run libraries have become obsolete since digital gadgets can completely replace them. I concur this point of view completely, because the core purpose of a library was to provide a vast variety of books on various knowledge areas could be made available, and it is now easily accessible to anyone with a simple click. The funding spent for maintaining such institutions could be served well elsewhere in different public serving departments, and also in further enhancing the digital aspect of it. To begin, with the passage of time and with technological and cultural change many things became obsolete. Such as, in earlier days people used to research and access knowledgeable information from publicly funded libraries, and people used to gather in these libraries in their free time, but now since everyone is so clenched up in their daily routine they and they have a smartphone in their pockets loaded with tons of information and books. Thus, due to the constraint of free time and ease of alternative access available the trend of visiting these libraries has decreased. Furthermore, the amount of budget spent by government to make these libraries up and running is exacerbated. Alternatively, if this funding is to be utilized in other essential departments, such as universities, schools etc. , the result would be much more fruitful. Along with this, the government could develop their own digital library portal, because it is a very lucrative venture in terms of investment, too. To illustrate, one of the world's biggest online store "Amazon" realized this opportunity and it launched its own e-tablet named "Kindle tablet", it is a tablet specifically designed for reading books purchased from their e-store. In conclusion, utilization of tax money on physical libraries is useless, because of technological advancements. In the near future, I think, these libraries would be abolished and would convert them into some other public serving organizations.
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run libraries have become obsolete since digital gadgets can completely replace them. I concur this point of view completely,
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because
the core purpose of a library was to provide a vast variety of books on various knowledge areas could
be made
available, and it is
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now
easily
accessible to anyone with a simple click. The funding spent for maintaining such institutions could
be served
well elsewhere in
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different
public serving departments, and
also
in
further
enhancing the digital aspect of it.

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begin
, with the passage of time and with technological and cultural
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change
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many
things became obsolete. Such as, in earlier days
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people
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used
to research and access knowledgeable information from
publicly
funded libraries, and
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people
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used
to gather in these libraries in their free time,
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now
since everyone is
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clenched up in their daily routine
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they and
they have a smartphone in their pockets loaded with tons of information and books.
Thus
, due to the constraint of free time and
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ease
of alternative access available the trend of visiting these libraries has decreased.

Furthermore
, the amount of budget spent by
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government
to
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make
these libraries up and running
is exacerbated
.
Alternatively
, if this funding is to
be utilized
in other essential departments, such as universities, schools etc.
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,
the result would be much more fruitful. Along with this, the
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government
could develop their
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own
digital library portal,
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because
it is a
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very
lucrative venture in terms of investment, too. To illustrate, one of the world's biggest online store
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Amazon
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realized this opportunity and it launched its
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e-tablet named
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Kindle tablet
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, it is a tablet
specifically
designed for reading books
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purchased
from their e-store.

In conclusion
, utilization of tax money on physical libraries is useless,
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because
of technological advancements. In the near future, I
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think
, these libraries would
be abolished
and would convert them into
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some
other public serving organizations.
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IELTS essay Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
324 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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