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Some people believe that who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than who prefer to watch TV. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people believe that who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than who prefer to watch TV. v. 1
It is argued that reading books helps people nurturing imagination and developing language skills rather than watching TV. While it may suit with many people, I believe that reading books and watching TV play an equally important role in broadening the knowledge. On the one hand, the option to reading books to enlarging the knowledge is advantageous to some extents. Firstly, valuable books have a lot of laudable knowledge such as references as well as books that come highly recommend and success stories. It is the reason why reading books play an important role in expanding the imagination. Secondly, the language which is used in books is carefully chosen which allows people can learn the way that authors expressed their ideas as well as they way they used words. On the other hand, I believe that watching TV is a great method to draw inspiration and develop language skills. Interesting programs on TV can help people to push their imagination and easily access a world of knowledge. For example, TV advertisements which have lively animation and interesting songs allow children to expand their imagination. Some language training programs which are shown on the TV help people can develop their language skills without paying fees. There is evidence to support the idea that people can develop their language skill through watching some TV programs about language. In conclusion, it is certainly true that reading books is essential to help people nurture imagination as well as develop language skills, this is by no means that watching TV plays an important role.
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people
, I believe that
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and watching TV play an
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important
role in broadening the knowledge.

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reading
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books
to enlarging the knowledge is advantageous to
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some
extents.
Firstly
, valuable
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books
have
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a lot of
laudable knowledge such as references
as well
as
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books
that
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come
highly
recommend and success stories. It is the reason why
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reading
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books
play an
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important
role in expanding the
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imagination
.
Secondly
, the
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language
which is
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used
in
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books
is
carefully
chosen which
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allows
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people
can learn the way that authors expressed their
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ideas
as well
as they way they
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used
words.

On the other hand
, I believe that watching TV is a great method to draw inspiration and
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develop
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language
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skills
. Interesting programs on TV can
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help
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people
to push their
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imagination
and
easily
access a world of knowledge.
For example
, TV advertisements which have lively animation and interesting songs
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allow
children to expand their
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imagination
.
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Some
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language
training programs which
are shown
on the TV
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help
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people
can
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develop
their
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language
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skills
without paying fees. There is evidence to support the
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idea
that
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people
can
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develop
their
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language
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skill
through watching
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some
TV programs about language.

In conclusion
, it is
certainly
true that
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reading
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books
is essential to
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help
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people
nurture
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imagination
as well
as
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develop
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language
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skills
, this is by no means that watching TV plays an
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important
role.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that who read books can develop more imagination and language skills than who prefer to watch TV. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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