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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions. Do you agree or disagree? v.3

Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions. v. 3
It is often argued that maintaining public libraries are no longer necessary in today’s world because the development of computer technology has allowed us to access a great deal of information on the internet more efficiently. While I accept that there are clear benefits of online libraries over public libraries, I believe that it is still worth spending money on maintaining public libraries. There are two main advantages of online sources of information. Firstly, online sources can store a huge amount of information that is greater than any physical library. This allows researchers to easily get the information they need without having to travel to a local library. Furthermore, people can look for information on the Internet whenever they want, while most libraries can only be visited during several hours per day. This is therefore particularly beneficial to those who have a hectic schedule and cannot visit these places during the operating hours. However, the preservation of local libraries is still necessary because of their distinguishing features which cannot be substituted by online sources. Libraries, in some countries, are still one of the most popular means of accessing information among senior citizens, regardless of the availability of online information. In fact, most elderly people these days are technophobes and therefore physical libraries are their preferred option. Furthermore, public libraries can be considered a more reliable source of information, compared with online sources. Indeed, there is an abundance of inaccurate and unreliable information on the Internet, while libraries have proved to be a more reliable information source, with the information being carefully categorized by library staff members. In conclusion, despite the benefits of computer technology in providing information, in my opinion, there are good grounds for rejecting the view that spending money on maintaining public libraries is unnecessary.
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argued that maintaining
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public
libraries are no longer necessary in
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today
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because
the development of computer technology has
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allowed
us to access a great deal of
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information
on the internet more
efficiently
. While I accept that there are
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clear
benefits of
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online
libraries over
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public
libraries, I believe that it is
still
worth spending money on maintaining
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public
libraries.

There are two main advantages of
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online
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sources
of
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information
.
Firstly
,
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online
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sources
can store a huge amount of
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information
that is
greater than any physical library. This
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allows
researchers to
easily
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get
the
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information
they need without having to travel to a local library.
Furthermore
,
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people
can look for
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information
on the Internet whenever they want, while most libraries can
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only
be visited
during several hours per day. This is
therefore
particularly
beneficial to those who have a hectic schedule and cannot visit these places during the operating hours.

However
, the preservation of local libraries is
still
necessary
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because
of their distinguishing features which cannot
be substituted
by
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online
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sources
. Libraries, in
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some
countries, are
still
one of the most popular means of accessing
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information
among senior citizens, regardless of the availability of
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online
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information
. In fact, most elderly
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people
these days are technophobes and
therefore
physical libraries are their preferred option.
Furthermore
,
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public
libraries can
be considered
a more reliable
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source
of
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information
, compared with
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online
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sources
.
Indeed
, there is an abundance of inaccurate and unreliable
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information
on the Internet, while libraries have proved to be a more reliable
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information
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source
, with the
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information
being
carefully
categorized by library staff members.

In conclusion
, despite the benefits of computer technology in providing
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information
, in my opinion, there are
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good
grounds for rejecting the view that spending money on maintaining
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public
libraries is unnecessary.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
297 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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