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Some people think that goverment is wasting money on the arts, and that this money could be spent elsewhere. To what extent to you agree with this view? v.1

Some people think that goverment is wasting money on the arts, and that this money could be spent elsewhere. v. 1
Few people consider that the regime is spending wealth on the arts, also that this money should be spent somewhere which is better for the society. While I disagree that the spending capital on art is a waste of resources, I do feel that some funding should be allocated for the welfare of the public. To begin with, arts is an essential part of culture which allows people not only to express their creativity, but also their opinions, their feelings and emotions. For instance, arts institutions organizing different events provide a great opportunity to artists not only to share their ideas with the public, but also to shed light on the critical social issues. Art shows to future generations which they remember that how our ancient people fought for our nation, our culture, and for our society. Therefore the ministry should support this idea and put some resources to it. However, secondly spending on the arts, ministry should not forget to fulfil the basic public needs, it is occasionally observed when election time comes. For example, In the India power spend crores of wage to build a statue instead of spending it for poor people or for hospitals, schools and many more. Which is helpful for needy citizens. To make a powerful national union should support them to come into the light of the vast growing world. In conclusion, while others people opinion may vary, in my view, there is no waste of fund in supporting the arts, but the welfare of the public should be the top priority of the politics when it comes to allocation of resource.
Few
people
consider that the regime is
spending
wealth on the
arts
,
also
that this money should
be spent
somewhere which is better for the society. While I disagree that the
spending
capital on
art
is a waste of resources, I do feel that
some
funding should
be allocated
for the welfare of the public.

To
begin
with,
arts
is an essential part of culture which
allows
people
not
only
to express their creativity,
but
also
their opinions, their feelings and emotions.
For instance
,
arts
institutions organizing
different
events
provide a great opportunity to artists not
only
to share their
ideas
with the public,
but
also
to shed light on the critical social issues.
Art
shows
to future generations which they remember that how our ancient
people
fought for our nation, our culture, and for our society.
Therefore
the ministry should support this
idea
and put
some
resources to it.

However
,
secondly
spending
on the
arts
, ministry should not forget to fulfil the basic public needs, it is
occasionally
observed when election time
comes
.
For example
, In the India power spend crores of wage to build a statue
instead
of
spending it for
poor
people
or for hospitals, schools and
many
more. Which is helpful for needy citizens. To
make
a powerful national union should support them to
come
into the light of the vast growing world.

In conclusion
, while others
people
opinion may vary, in my view, there is no waste of fund in supporting the
arts
,
but
the welfare of the public should be the top priority of the politics when it
comes
to allocation of resource.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that goverment is wasting money on the arts, and that this money could be spent elsewhere. v. 1

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