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Living in large cities today poses many problems for people. What are these problems? Should governments encourage more people to live in smaller towns? v.2

Living in large cities today poses many problems for people. What are these problems? Should governments encourage more people to live in smaller towns? v. 2
These days a majority of people migrate to metro cities for a good life and better job opportunities. However, the cost of living in big cities is rising year after year. In addition, they face a plethora of problems such as air pollution, crowding, lack of adequate living space and stress. In my opinion, the governments across the world should take the initiative to motivate people to live in smaller cities as this reduces the burden on the already overcrowded metropolitan states. The biggest problems of metropolises these days are overcrowding and pollution. More and more people are migrating from smaller villages and settling in larger cities. This is posing a severe threat to the environment. Most of these cities have become a concrete jungle with minimum greenery. The man to land ratio has also increased which results in less space to live. Since these cities are already overcrowded, sometimes the basic infrastructure is missing as the government is not able to handle the problem of crowding. For instance, in Mumbai, plenty of people live in slums due to lack of affordable housing. In my opinion, the government should start investing more in the development of smaller cities. If people are happy there then they might also rule out the option of migrating to big cities. This will decrease the load on bigger towns. A good blueprint for the development of smaller cities will be fruitful in the long run as it would cure the problem of overpopulation in larger places. This will eventually reduce pollution as well. To sum up, this essay discussed the problems such as over pollution, overpopulation and space constraints faced by people of metropolitan cities. This essay also stated why I feel that the government should discourage rural people from migrating to urban areas.
These days a majority of
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people
migrate to metro
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cities
for a
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good
life and better job opportunities.
However
, the cost of living in
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big
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cities
is rising year after year.
In addition
, they face a plethora of
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problems
such as air
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pollution
, crowding, lack of adequate living space and
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stress
. In my opinion, the
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governments
across the world should take the initiative to motivate
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people
to
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live
in smaller
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cities
as this
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reduces
the burden on the already overcrowded metropolitan states.

The biggest
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problems
of metropolises these days are overcrowding and
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pollution
. More and more
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people
are migrating from smaller villages and settling in larger
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cities
. This is posing a severe threat to the environment. Most of these
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cities
have become a concrete jungle with minimum greenery. The
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man
to land ratio has
also
increased which results in less space to
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live
. Since these
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cities
are already overcrowded,
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sometimes
the basic infrastructure is missing as the
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government
is not able to handle the
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problem
of crowding.
For instance
, in Mumbai,
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plenty
of
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people
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live
in slums due to lack of affordable housing.

In my opinion, the
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government
should
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start
investing more in the development of smaller
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cities
. If
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people
are happy there then they might
also
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rule
out the option of migrating to
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big
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cities
. This will decrease the load on bigger towns. A
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good
blueprint for the development of smaller
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cities
will be fruitful in the long run as it would cure the
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problem
of overpopulation in larger places. This will
eventually
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reduce
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pollution
as well
.

To sum up, this essay discussed the
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problems
such as over
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pollution
, overpopulation and space constraints faced by
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people
of metropolitan
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cities
. This essay
also
stated why I feel that the
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government
should discourage rural
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people
from migrating to urban areas.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Living in large cities today poses many problems for people. What are these problems? Should governments encourage more people to live in smaller towns? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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