Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extend do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantage? v.5
Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. v. 5
As industrial revolution and technology increase, the machines and robots became real and those have been dominating many parts of our life. This change has several benefits but also, there are some serious disadvantages.
The first of disadvantage is that mankind's jobs are losing by robots. Most of companies and factories use more machines than hire people; those can work the whole day and more cheaper than a person. Because of this problem, finding job will be more difficult. Second, due to increasing the rate of losing jobs, also average earning money per each person will decrease. Everyone's lives will be harder than a high-tech century. Lastly, the rate of birth is going to decrease; people do not need to earn money and go outside. Also, it can decrease the chance to meet each other, so, after 5 decades, maybe the number of mankind will be half than now.
On the other hand, the first benefit is that companies/factories can reduce their money because using them is cheaper, so they will concentrate to make a higher quality and low price things from the factory. Secondly, in agriculture, the farmers can use them; they can cultivate a lot of crops than before, as a result of it, the cost of crops will decrease. Then, we can buy crops cheaper price. Lastly, our activities during leisure time will improve such as games, movies, dramas. We can enjoy our break time more relax even babies, elder citizens and females.
In conclusion, the industrial revolution is making our life better, however, there are also dangers. In my view, after 50 years, most of career will be destroyed by them, so, please be careful to use them and develop the level of life.
As industrial revolution and technology increase, the machines and robots became real and those have been dominating
many
parts of our life. This
change
has several benefits
but
also
, there are
some
serious disadvantages.
The
first
of disadvantage is that mankind's jobs are losing by robots. Most of
companies
and factories
use
more machines than hire
people
;
those can
work the whole day and
more cheaper
than a person.
Because of this
problem, finding job will be more difficult. Second, due to increasing the rate of losing jobs,
also
average earning money per each person will
decrease
. Everyone's
lives
will be harder than a high-tech century.
Lastly
, the rate of birth is going to
decrease
;
people
do not need to earn money and go outside.
Also
, it can
decrease
the chance to
meet
each other,
so
, after 5 decades, maybe the number of mankind will be half than
now
.
On the other hand
, the
first
benefit is that
companies
/factories can
reduce
their money
because
using them is cheaper,
so
they will concentrate to
make
a higher quality and low price things from the factory.
Secondly
, in agriculture, the farmers can
use
them; they can cultivate
a lot of
crops than
before
,
as a result
of it, the cost of crops will
decrease
. Then, we can
buy
crops cheaper price.
Lastly
, our activities during leisure time will
improve
such as games, movies, dramas. We can enjoy our break time more relax even babies, elder citizens and females.
In conclusion
, the industrial revolution is making our life better,
however
, there are
also
dangers
. In my view, after 50 years,
most of career
will be
destroyed
by them,
so
,
please
be careful to
use
them and develop the level of life.
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