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Living in a country where you have to speak in a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

Living in a country where you have to speak in a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems. v. 3
Living abroad these days spreads over people, especially adolescents. There are several positive points while one of the main disadvantages is changing language which can cause some social and practical problems. I definitely agree with the statement and in this essay the different aspects of the issue will be discussed. Firstly, the different languages will result in variation of culture, obviously. The same words have not the same meaning in all societies and this diversity can be very narrow. For example, it can be understood a positive meaning of a word while they may be negative in other countries, so this can lead to misunderstanding and can cause serious fights and problems for foreigners. Thus, they should be aware of the use of the host language to use them correctly and appropriately. In addition to that, immigrants should try hard for making a relationship with the citizens. For the first months, adopting with groups and making new friends would be like as travelling to the Mars, where no one can understand you and your emotions. In psychological side of view, it can make everyone depressed when cannot do anything in social activities. Therefore, these communication problems may lead people to return to their hometown and forget the immigration. To summarize the article, although starting a new life in a foreign country can have several positive points, but language barriers can distance your goals and cause returning. I believe that if anyone decides to live abroad, he should become an expert in destination language culture before arriving there.
Living abroad these days spreads over
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people
,
especially
adolescents. There are several
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positive
points while one of the main disadvantages is changing
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language
which can cause
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some
social and practical problems. I definitely
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agree
with the statement and in this essay the
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different
aspects of the issue will
be discussed
.

Firstly
, the
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different
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languages
will result in variation of culture,
obviously
. The same words have not the same meaning in all societies and this diversity can be
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very
narrow.
For example
, it can
be understood
a
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positive
meaning of a word while they may be
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negative
in other countries,
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so
this can lead to misunderstanding and can cause serious fights and problems for foreigners.
Thus
, they should be aware of the
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use
of the host
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language
to
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use
them
correctly
and
appropriately
.

In addition
to that, immigrants should try
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hard
for making a relationship with the citizens. For the
first
months, adopting with groups and making new friends would be like as travelling to the Mars, where no one can understand you and your emotions. In psychological side of view, it can
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make
everyone depressed when cannot do anything in social activities.
Therefore
, these communication problems may lead
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people
to return to their hometown and forget the immigration.

To summarize
the article, although starting a new life in a foreign country can have several
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positive
points,
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but
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language
barriers can distance your goals and cause returning. I believe that if anyone decides to
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live
abroad, he should become an expert in destination
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language
culture
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before
arriving there.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Living in a country where you have to speak in a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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