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livin g in a foreign country that requires us to speak foreign language can cause social problems as well as practical problems To what extend do you agree or disagree v.1

livin g in a foreign country that requires us to speak foreign language can cause social problems as well as practical problems v. 1
living as a foreigner in abroad countries requires us to communicate with foreign languages. Many people believe that this requirement causes us some threats, both social and daily life. In my point of view, i espouse this concept with several reasons. Firstly, we will be unable to socialize with the society. As we know, we are social creatures, and this means that we should have the ability to blend in with the society. we should accomplish our main task as foreigners elegantly. when we are not professional in using foreign languages, we will struggling to interact with society. lack of socialization will have a dreadful impact to our mental. Majority of people living abroad will find that lacking in conversations will be an inhibitor to their life. They will have and ascending chance to undergo character changes and most of them will end up being an introvert. thus, language is an imperative for someone who is planning to live in abroad countries. Secondly, we will not be able to endure our daily life. when we can not communicate with an array of languages, will not stand a chance to complete our life in bustling metropolitan cities. we can not even do the simplest things such as; shopping and using the bus. To illustrate, an employee can not coordinate with friends and compete with rivals. Moreover, a student can not understand lessons, especially the abstruse ones, with a good foundation of language ability. thus, communication skill is an imperative to be a successful foreigner. In conclusion, language ability is the main factor to obtain our ideal life. lacking in this indispensable key of living will be an inhibitor for us. In my opinion, we should be resilient foreigners, and we should nurture our language skill, in order to utilizes it in our daily life.
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living
as a foreigner in abroad countries requires us to communicate with foreign
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languages
.
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Many
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people
believe that this requirement causes us
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some
threats, both social and daily
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life
. In my point of view,
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i
espouse this concept with several reasons.

Firstly
, we will be unable to socialize with the society. As we know, we are social creatures, and this means that we should have the ability to blend in with the society.
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we
should accomplish our main task as foreigners
elegantly
.
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when
we are not professional in using foreign
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languages
, we will
The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: "struggle"
struggling
to interact with society.
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lack
of socialization will have a dreadful impact to our mental. Majority of
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people
living abroad will find that lacking in conversations will be an inhibitor to their
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life
. They will have and ascending chance to undergo character
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changes
and most of them will
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end
up being an introvert.
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thus
,
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language
is an imperative for someone who is planning to
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live
in abroad countries.

Secondly
, we will not be able to endure our daily
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life
.
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when
we can not communicate with an array of
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languages
, will not stand a chance to complete our
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life
in bustling metropolitan cities.
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we
can not even do the simplest things such as; shopping and using the bus. To illustrate, an employee can not coordinate with friends and compete with rivals.
Moreover
, a student can not understand lessons,
especially
the abstruse ones, with a
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good
foundation of
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language
ability.
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thus
, communication
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skill
is an imperative to be a successful foreigner.

In conclusion
,
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language
ability is the main factor to obtain our ideal
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life
.
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lacking
in this indispensable key of living will be an inhibitor for us. In my opinion, we should be resilient foreigners, and we should nurture our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
language
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
, in order to
Did you mean "utilize"?
utilizes
it in our daily
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life
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes
We should learn languages because language is the only thing worth knowing even poorly.
Kató Lomb

IELTS essay livin g in a foreign country that requires us to speak foreign language can cause social problems as well as practical problems v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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