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Lifestyle and culture of different countries are becoming similar. Is it a positive development or negative? v.1

Lifestyle and culture of different countries are becoming similar. Is it a positive development or negative? v. 1
Advancements in communication technology have made the entire world a global village where information travels from one corner to another in the blink of an eye. Due to this information symmetry and accessibility, the world is becoming increasingly similar. Some people argue that this is a negative development. While I do not quite consider this as totally negative, in my opinion, there is definitely a need to preserve diversity. The first and foremost reason to oppose the tendency of countries to become similar is that it will lead to the loss of indigenous culture, traditions, customs and lifestyles. These lifestyles and culture were developed several millennia ago and suit the specific country. So, adopting another country’s lifestyles and culture might not be suitable for people living in that country. For example, in a country like India, it is better to eat vegetarian food and wear cotton clothes because the climate is hot. Furthermore, it is unsustainable if people living everywhere follow the same lifestyle. For example, the per capita consumption of fossil fuels in the USA is 20 times higher than the per capita consumption of the same fuel in a developing country. If people everywhere start using the same amount of energy, we will soon run out of its supply. Another reason for nurturing diversity is that diversity enhances innovation. Different culture and lifestyles provide one a different perspective on life. Thus, many schools and colleges prefer to increase diversity in their classroom to enrich the learning experience. In the past, many pharmaceutical research teams in the USA attributed their success to essential inputs brought in by teammates of different nationality. On the other hand, by adopting similarity, one can protect oneself from discrimination based on race, nationality or style of clothing. In addition, similarity enhances acceptance. It also makes life easier especially when people travel abroad. In conclusion, considering the aforementioned views, in my opinion, it is crucial to protect diversity of different countries but at the same time there is no harm in imbibing the best practices of other countries. Do you have an essay on this topic? Submit it below in the comments for a free band score estimate.
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increasingly
similar.
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people
argue that this is a
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negative
development. While I do not quite consider this as
totally
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negative
, in my opinion, there is definitely a need to preserve diversity.

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first
and foremost reason to oppose the tendency of
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countries
to become similar is that it will lead to the loss of indigenous
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culture
, traditions, customs and
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lifestyles
. These
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lifestyles
and
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culture
were developed
several millennia ago and suit the specific
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country
.
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So
, adopting another
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country’s
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lifestyles
and
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culture
might not be suitable for
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people
living in that
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country
.
For example
, in a
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country
like India, it is better to eat vegetarian food and wear cotton clothes
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because
the climate is hot.
Furthermore
, it is unsustainable if
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people
living everywhere follow the same
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lifestyle
.
For example
, the per capita consumption of fossil fuels in the USA is 20 times higher than the per capita consumption of the same fuel in a developing
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country
. If
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people
everywhere
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start
using the same amount of energy, we will
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soon
run out of its supply.

Another reason for nurturing
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diversity
is that
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diversity
enhances innovation.
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Different
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culture
and
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lifestyles
provide one a
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different
perspective on life.
Thus
,
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many
schools and colleges prefer to increase
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diversity
in their classroom to enrich the learning experience. In the past,
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many
pharmaceutical research teams in the USA attributed their success to essential inputs brought in by teammates of
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different
nationality.

On the other hand
, by adopting similarity, one can protect oneself from discrimination based on race, nationality or style of clothing.
In addition
, similarity enhances acceptance. It
also
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makes
life easier
especially
when
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people
travel abroad.

In conclusion
, considering the aforementioned views, in my opinion, it is crucial to protect
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diversity
of
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different
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countries
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but
at the same time there is no harm in imbibing the best practices of other countries.

Do you have an essay on this topic? Submit it below in the comments for a free band score estimate.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Lifestyle and culture of different countries are becoming similar. Is it a positive development or negative? v. 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
363 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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