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In the past, people wore their traditional clothes and followed their culture. These days, most people wear similar clothes and therefore look very similar to one another. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? v.2

In the past, people wore their traditional clothes and followed their culture. These days, most people wear similar clothes and therefore look very similar to one another. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? v. 2
Nowadays, people are changing their dressing sense and adopt Western culture's clothes so all people looks like same so that I think its positive trend. Some reasons for my inclinations are articulated in ensuring paragraphs. First and foremost, the biggest reason to support my notion is that when people wear similar clothes, they feel global unity and more tolerant towards each other even though their religions and countries are different. In addition, people wear western country's cloth like jeans and shirt and it is very comfortable and suitable in work time because some nation clothes not suitable in work time. For instance, Indian traditional clothes not comfortable in work time. Moreover, people wear the same kind of clothes, then clothes company make in large. Number and its help in reducing cost of clothes. To exemplify, company like Levis, makes clothes in large quantity and cut price for the customer. By this, it is also true that, equal clothes change the human's attitude and bring them together. Beside this, some people think that this trend aloof value of traditional clothes and culture but, all cultures have some traditions, which can never be forgotten. Likewise, this development is positive for the cotton industry. By this trend, production is increasing drastically in many countries and aid in the economy of a country. In a nutshell, it can be said that in the modern world, people must wear the equal type of clothes because its advantages easily outweigh its disadvantages. It is positive for human life and economy of a nation.
Nowadays,
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people
are changing their dressing sense and adopt Western culture's
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clothes
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so
all
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people
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looks
like same
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so
that I
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think
its
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positive
trend.
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Some
reasons for my inclinations
are articulated
in ensuring paragraphs.

First
and foremost, the biggest reason to support my notion is that when
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people
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wear
similar
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clothes
, they feel global unity and more tolerant towards each other
even though
their religions and countries are
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different
.
In addition
,
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people
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wear
western country's
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cloth
like jeans and shirt and it is
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very
comfortable and suitable in work time
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because
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some
nation
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clothes
not suitable in work time.
For instance
, Indian traditional
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clothes
not comfortable in work time.
Moreover
,
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people
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wear
the same kind of
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clothes
, then
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clothes
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company
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make
in large. Number and its
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help
in reducing cost of
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clothes
. To exemplify,
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company
like Levis,
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makes
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clothes
in large quantity and
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cut price
for the customer.

By this, it is
also
true that, equal
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clothes
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change
the human's attitude and bring them together. Beside this,
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some
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people
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think
that this trend aloof value of traditional
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clothes
and culture
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but
, all cultures have
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some
traditions, which can never
be forgotten
.
Likewise
, this development is
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positive
for the cotton industry. By this trend, production is increasing
drastically
in
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many
countries and aid in the economy of a country.

In a nutshell, it can
be said
that in the modern world,
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people
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must
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wear
the equal type of
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clothes
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because
its advantages
easily
outweigh its disadvantages. It is
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positive
for human life and economy of a nation.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes
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IELTS essay In the past, people wore their traditional clothes and followed their culture. These days, most people wear similar clothes and therefore look very similar to one another. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
9
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0
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Task Achievement: 9.0
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