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Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree and disagree? v.4

Life was better when technology was simpler. v. 4
It is often argued that people were happy before the technology was not so fast as these days. This essay completely disagrees with this statement because due to the improved technology students are able to find the best teacher for themselves from around the globe and people are able to connect with their loved ones easily who live in other countries. Technology has made humans lives easy. That is to say that students have the internet in their pockets in shape of an iPhone or other smartphones and through them they can study whatever courses they want, from the best teachers around the globe. For example, I did my IELTS preparation through the internet from one the best IELTS teachers in the world, who lives in the United Kingdom while I live in Pakistan. Due to the technological improvement, we are able to connect any time with our family members who live in other parts of the planet. In other words, we were not able to do it around 3decades ago, many times we even would not know that they are alive or not. For instance, one of my uncles, my father’s eldest brother who lives in the USA and my father talks to him 3 or 4 times a week just because of the advancement of technology. In conclusion, some say that people were better off without the advancement of technology, I believe improved technology has decreased the struggle of humans because pupils are able to find the best teachers for themselves from other countries and people can talk to their relatives easily through the internet.
It is
often
argued that
people
were happy
before
the
technology
was not
so
fast
as these days. This essay completely disagrees with this statement
because
due to the
improved
technology
students are
able
to find the
best
teacher
for themselves from around the globe and
people
are
able
to connect with their
loved
ones
easily
who
live
in
other
countries.

Technology has made humans
lives
easy.
That is
to say that students have the internet in their pockets in shape of an iPhone or
other
smartphones and through them they can study whatever courses they want, from the
best
teachers
around the globe.
For example
, I did my IELTS preparation through the internet from one the
best
IELTS
teachers
in the world,
who
lives
in the United Kingdom while I
live
in Pakistan.

Due to the technological improvement, we are
able
to connect any time with our family members
who
live
in
other
parts of the planet. In
other
words, we were not
able
to do it around 3decades ago,
many
times we even would not know that they are alive or not.
For instance
, one of my uncles, my father’s eldest brother
who
lives
in the USA and my father talks to him 3 or 4 times a week
just
because
of the advancement of technology.

In conclusion
,
some
say that
people
were better off without the advancement of
technology
, I believe
improved
technology
has decreased the struggle of humans
because
pupils are
able
to find the
best
teachers
for themselves from
other
countries and
people
can talk to their relatives
easily
through the internet.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Life was better when technology was simpler. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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