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Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent do you agree and disagree? v.4

Life was better when technology was simpler. v. 4
It is often argued that people were happy before the technology was not so fast as these days. This essay completely disagrees with this statement because due to the improved technology students are able to find the best teacher for themselves from around the globe and people are able to connect with their loved ones easily who live in other countries. Technology has made humans lives easy. That is to say that students have the internet in their pockets in shape of an iPhone or other smartphones and through them they can study whatever courses they want, from the best teachers around the globe. For example, I did my IELTS preparation through the internet from one the best IELTS teachers in the world, who lives in the United Kingdom while I live in Pakistan. Due to the technological improvement, we are able to connect any time with our family members who live in other parts of the planet. In other words, we were not able to do it around 3decades ago, many times we even would not know that they are alive or not. For instance, one of my uncles, my father’s eldest brother who lives in the USA and my father talks to him 3 or 4 times a week just because of the advancement of technology. In conclusion, some say that people were better off without the advancement of technology, I believe improved technology has decreased the struggle of humans because pupils are able to find the best teachers for themselves from other countries and people can talk to their relatives easily through the internet.
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argued that
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people
were happy
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before
the
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technology
was not
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so
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fast
as these days. This essay completely disagrees with this statement
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because
due to the
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improved
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technology
students are
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able
to find the
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best
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teacher
for themselves from around the globe and
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people
are
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able
to connect with their
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loved
ones
easily
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who
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live
in
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other
countries.

Technology has made humans
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lives
easy.
That is
to say that students have the internet in their pockets in shape of an iPhone or
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other
smartphones and through them they can study whatever courses they want, from the
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best
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teachers
around the globe.
For example
, I did my IELTS preparation through the internet from one the
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best
IELTS
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teachers
in the world,
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who
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lives
in the United Kingdom while I
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live
in Pakistan.

Due to the technological improvement, we are
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able
to connect any time with our family members
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who
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live
in
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other
parts of the planet. In
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other
words, we were not
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able
to do it around 3decades ago,
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many
times we even would not know that they are alive or not.
For instance
, one of my uncles, my father’s eldest brother
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who
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lives
in the USA and my father talks to him 3 or 4 times a week
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just
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because
of the advancement of technology.

In conclusion
,
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some
say that
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people
were better off without the advancement of
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technology
, I believe
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improved
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technology
has decreased the struggle of humans
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because
pupils are
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able
to find the
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best
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teachers
for themselves from
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other
countries and
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people
can talk to their relatives
easily
through the internet.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Life was better when technology was simpler. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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