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Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. What are the reasons for this, and what solutions can be suggested? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. v.6

Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. What are the reasons for this, and what solutions can be suggested? v. 6
The last few years have experienced burgeoning growth in the youth crime level. Lack of parental guidance, peer pressure and unemployment are the main reasons for this. There are a number of effective solutions to reduce the number of youth convicts. One main reason for young people contemplating crime is because they are not guided properly either by parents or by teachers. For example, if the family and school teach them to shun criminal and anti-social behaviour, the crime level can be reduced. Another point to consider is that peer groups exert enormous influence in the behaviour of young people. When a person is with the peer group, they only pay scant attention to the outcome of a crime and, therefore, commit unpremeditated crime. Finally, because of the fierce competition in the job market, young people find it so hard to find a job and meet their needs. This encourages them to commit crimes such as pick-pocketing and holding a person for ransom. There are a numerous solutions to tackle this problem. Firstly, more police on the beat can put off people from committing crime. If people are aware of the consequences of committing a crime, they will be put off from doing it. Secondly, the government should introduce training program to ensure that more people are getting employed. For instance, the convicts who are unemployed are more in number when compared to people with job and they mostly commit crime for catering their basic needs. In conclusion, improving employment opportunities as well as enforcing law and order can put off people from committing crime.
The last few years have experienced burgeoning growth in the youth
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crime
level. Lack of parental guidance, peer pressure and unemployment are the main reasons for this. There are a number of effective solutions to
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reduce
the number of youth convicts.

One main reason for young
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people
contemplating
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crime
is
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because
they are not guided
properly
either by parents or by teachers.
For example
, if the family and school teach them to shun criminal and anti-social
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behaviour
, the
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crime
level can be
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reduced
. Another point to consider is that peer groups exert enormous influence in the
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behaviour
of young
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people
. When a person is with the peer group, they
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only
pay scant attention to the outcome of a
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crime
and,
therefore
, commit unpremeditated
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crime
.
Finally
,
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because
of the fierce competition in the job market, young
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people
find it
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so
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hard
to find a job and
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meet
their needs. This encourages them to commit
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crimes
such as pick-pocketing and holding a person for ransom.

There are a numerous
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solutions
to tackle this problem.
Firstly
, more police on the beat can put off
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people
from committing
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crime
. If
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people
are aware of the consequences of committing a
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crime
, they will
be put
off from doing it.
Secondly
, the
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government
should introduce training program to ensure that more
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people
are getting employed.
For instance
, the convicts who
are unemployed
are more in number when compared to
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people
with
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job and
they
mostly
commit
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crime
for catering their basic needs.

In conclusion
, improving employment opportunities
as well
as enforcing law and order can put off
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people
from committing
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crime
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. What are the reasons for this, and what solutions can be suggested? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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