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Learning a foreign language offers an insight into how people from other cultures think and seethe world. The teaching of a foreign language should be compulsory at all primary schools. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view? Give reasons fo v.1

Learning a foreign language offers an insight into how people from other cultures think and seethe world. The teaching of a foreign language should be compulsory at all primary schools. with this view? Give reasons fo v. 1
People today are increasingly concerned with individual happiness and work-life balance. The main problem for most people is that work takes up too much time and causes mental health issues and the best way to achieve this balance is to work more efficiently. The primary issues associated with work-life balance is the amount of time people must spend working and how this impacts their mental health. Since the global financial crisis of 2008, the job market around the world has become increasingly competitive. This means that aged workers may get pushed out of their jobs by younger graduates willing to work for less and that new graduates have to put in enormous extra hours to catch up. The end result is more work, which eats away at a person’s private life. Once your free time becomes restricted there are a variety of related mental health problems that can appear. For example, someone who is overworked can suffer from excessive stress, some forms of depression, and obesity because of the lack of time available to exercise. That is why there has been a sharp rise in the last decade in these problems. The best way for people to combat being overworked and get more time for their personal life is to work more efficiently. In an ideal world, there would be ways to alleviate the burden that put less stress on individuals, but making the most of your time is a more pragmatic solution. For example, smartphones allow people to get a lot of work done in what were previously wasted hours in the past. You can send emails, make phone calls, and use productivity applications when waiting for the bus, train, or standing in line. People will have to make the choice not to scroll through Facebook or read the news, but that is a small sacrifice to have some extra time at the end of the day to do their hobbies or spend time with a loved one. In conclusion, the problems associated with poor work-life balance are especially apparent because of the current economic climate and the best solution is to find ways to maximise efficiency. If more people changed their daily habits related to social media and using the internet, then they might be able to find more worthwhile passions and not feel as though their life is passing them by.
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today
are
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concerned with individual happiness and work-life
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balance
. The main problem for most
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people
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is
that
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work
takes up too much
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time
and causes mental health issues and the best
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way
to achieve this
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balance
is to
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work
more
efficiently
.

The primary issues associated with work-life
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balance
is the amount of
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time
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people
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must
spend working and how this impacts their mental health. Since the global financial crisis of 2008, the job market around the world has become
increasingly
competitive. This means that aged workers may
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get
pushed out of their jobs by younger graduates willing to
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work
for less and that new graduates
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have to
put in enormous extra hours to catch up. The
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end
result is more
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work
, which eats away at a person’s private life.
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Once
your free
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time
becomes restricted there are a variety of related mental health problems that can appear.
For example
, someone who
is overworked
can suffer from excessive
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stress
,
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some
forms of depression, and obesity
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because
of the lack of
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time
available to exercise.
That is
why there has been a sharp rise in the last decade in these problems.

The best
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way
for
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people
to combat
being overworked
and
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get
more
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time
for their personal life is to
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work
more
efficiently
. In an ideal world, there would be
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ways
to alleviate the burden that put less
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stress
on individuals,
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but
making the most of your
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time
is a more pragmatic solution.
For example
, smartphones
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allow
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people
to
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get
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a lot of
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work
done in what were previously wasted hours in the past. You can
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send
emails,
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make
phone calls, and
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use
productivity applications when waiting for the bus, train, or standing in line.
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will
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have to
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the choice not to scroll through Facebook or read the news,
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but
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small
sacrifice to have
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some
extra
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time
at the
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end
of the day to do their hobbies or spend
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time
with a
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loved
one.

In conclusion
, the problems associated with poor work-life
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balance
are
especially
apparent
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because
of the
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current
economic climate and the best solution is to find
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ways
to
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maximise
efficiency. If more
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people
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changed
their daily habits related to social media and using the internet, then they might be able to find more worthwhile passions and not feel as though their life is passing them by.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Learning a foreign language offers an insight into how people from other cultures think and seethe world. The teaching of a foreign language should be compulsory at all primary schools. with this view? Give reasons fo v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
394 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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