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Large businesses have big budgets for marketing and promotion and, as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause? What could be done to encourage people to buy local products? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.4

Large businesses have big budgets for marketing and promotion and, as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause? What could be done to encourage people to buy local products? v. 4
Large businesses and international brands spend an enormous amount of money for marketing and advertising. Consequently, people tend to watch those advertisements all the time while small local businesses fail to reach the customers. This can lead to some serious problems, such as the closure of local businesses and the monopoly in business. Other than that, people could be easily trapped by large businesses. There are few steps that can be adopted to address this issue and motivate people to buy local products. Naturally, people prefer to buy products that were consciously or unconsciously publicised to their mind and thus many local businesses, even with their quality products, cannot attract consumers. The dominance of international brands and large businesses will destroy the market for locally made products and thus would make thousands of people unemployed. Moreover, large markets do their very best to attract the public attention to their products and advertising is one of the best tools they have. Sensitive, creative and deceptive advertisements and marketing policies often make the people believe that they need these products. This would create a monopoly in the market and people would often be deceived. Thus consumers would be trapped by larger businesses and would have no alternatives for them but to buy products of some particular brands. In order to encourage people to buy local products, some solutions should be taken into account. The government should strictly monitor and ban any deceptive and illusory advertisement from the mass media. People should compare a product's quality before purchasing from shops and the shop owners must shelf local products along with the branded products. Furthermore, a government authority should rate and review any product and disclose it to the public. Finally, local product manufacturers should be financially supported by the banks and the government as they are helpful to the economic progress of a country. The absolute dominance of large businesses can have unimaginable effects that can damage a city's or even a country's financial situation. A solution to this problem is systematising local markets and creating a closely integrated system that can have an effective outcome.
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and international brands spend an enormous amount of money for marketing and advertising.
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people
tend to
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those advertisements all the time while
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small
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local
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businesses
fail to reach the customers. This can lead to
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some
serious problems, such as the closure of
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local
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businesses
and the monopoly in
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business
. Other than that,
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people
could be
easily
trapped by
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large
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businesses
. There are few steps that can
be adopted
to address this issue and motivate
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people
to
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buy
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local
products.

Naturally
,
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people
prefer to
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buy
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products
that were
consciously
or
unconsciously
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publicised
to their mind and
thus
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many
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local
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businesses
, even with their quality
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products
, cannot attract consumers. The dominance of international brands and
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large
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businesses
will
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destroy
the
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market
for
locally
made
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products
and
thus
would
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make
thousands of
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people
unemployed.
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,
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large
markets do their
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very
best to attract the public attention to their
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products
and advertising is one of the best tools they have. Sensitive, creative and deceptive advertisements and marketing policies
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often
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make
the
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people
believe that they need these
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products
. This would create a monopoly in the
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market
and
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people
would
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often
be deceived
.
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consumers would
be trapped
by larger
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businesses
and would have no alternatives for them
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to
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buy
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products
of
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some
particular brands.

In order to encourage
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people
to
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buy
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local
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products
,
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solutions should
be taken
into account. The
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government
should
strictly
monitor and ban any deceptive and illusory advertisement from the mass media.
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People
should compare a product's quality
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before
purchasing from shops and the shop owners
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must
shelf
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local
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products
along with the branded
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products
.
Furthermore
, a
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government
authority should rate and review any
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product
and disclose it to the public.
Finally
,
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local
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product
manufacturers should be
financially
supported by the banks and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
as they are helpful to the economic progress of a country.

The absolute dominance of
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large
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businesses
can have unimaginable effects that can damage a city's or even a country's financial situation. A solution to this problem is
Possible spelling mistake. 'systematising' is British English.
systematising
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local
markets and creating a
closely
integrated system that can have an effective outcome.
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48Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Large businesses have big budgets for marketing and promotion and, as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause? What could be done to encourage people to buy local products? v. 4

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6.5
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