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with the rise of e-books comes the decline in paper books. some people see this as a good step forward while others do not. what are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend? v.7

with the rise of e-books comes the decline in paper books. some people see this as a good step forward while others do not. what are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend? v. 7
With the new technology, the education system has also changed drastically. The new study system like e-books have changed the use of paper books. The mass of people thinks that it's a positive step and others think the opposite. There are some pros and cons and I intend to discuss in ensuring paragraphs. Examining the former option, the primary importance of e-book is that is reduce is the use of paper, which indirectly prevents the cutting of trees. In addition, it also reduces the load of carrying books for the students and can carry their e-book wherever they want. Its application allows easy sharing and have in-build reading allowed feature which can help the students to learn new pronunciation. For instance, the majority of standard schools in Ahmedabad have started using e-books in higher standards. On the contrary, the smart books are costly then paper books. Moreover, it requires special computer device for working on it. With every advance gadget there is the privacy issue, so it requires anti-virus which add to the cost. Continuous use of e-books can cause vision problems for both students as well as teachers. Even children are not able to get a personal touch like hand written stories or chapters as they get to do with paper books. To add up, in paper books they can write information on it and in e-books chances of information loss is more. In the conclusion, I would pen down, saying that, old is gold, although with modernization, new technologies should be used in our day to day life but some traditional ways have their own significance as paper books do. Thus, disadvantages overweights advantages and paper books should be continue along with e-books.
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technology, the education system has
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study system like e-books have
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books
. The mass of
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people
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positive
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and others
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the opposite. There are
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pros and cons and I intend to discuss in ensuring paragraphs.

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of paper, which
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prevents
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reduces
the load of carrying
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books
for the students and can carry their e-book wherever they want. Its application
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allows
easy sharing and have in-build reading
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allowed
feature which can
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help
the students to learn
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new
pronunciation.
For instance
, the majority of standard schools in Ahmedabad have
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started
using e-books in higher standards.

On the contrary
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books
are costly then paper
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books
.
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of e-books can cause vision problems for both students
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as well as
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a personal touch like
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hand written
stories or chapters as they
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to do with paper
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books
. To
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up, in paper
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books
they can write information on it and in e-books chances of information loss is more.

In the conclusion, I would pen down, saying that,
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old
is gold, although with modernization,
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technologies should be
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used
in our
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day to day
life
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traditional ways have their
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significance as paper
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books
do.
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, disadvantages
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should be
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along with e-books.
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IELTS essay with the rise of e-books comes the decline in paper books. some people see this as a good step forward while others do not. what are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend? v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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