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Large business have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause? What could be done to encourage people to buy local products? v.2

Large business have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause? What could be done to encourage people to buy local products? v. 2
Trade and commerce play an important role in economic development. Big companies allocate a massive amount for selling and distribution of their new product, whereas, individuals are tempted for purchasing this item. In the market items produce by the other manufacturing entities will be unsold and in order promote product people must be offered a sample. Due to the large manufacturer exists in the society, small industries are suffering as their products are not being purchased by the people. The demand created by marketing by the multinational companies is forcing citizens to purchase their product only and the other tiny traders are not able to survive in the market as their item is not in demand and it is not being sold. For instance, In India, LG electronics are selling their items all the provinces. But the Geepas Ltd. Local brand are not able to sell as they are not able to afford additional cost of marketing. Furthermore, products produced by the native industries can be promoted only by explaining the people about the items. Offering the public free samples to use it and also to check the durability. Local people have already been lured to buy expensive items of Big companies and they will surely not buy the local produce item. So the people can test the free product at home and after knowing the power of the item. People will understand the real value of local product and also the price. Next time when they need to purchase public will opt for the native item because of the reliability and also the price. For instance, Geepas Ltd produces home appliance which is 35%cheaper compared to the LG electronic as the addition amount of marketing is added to price to recover from the customer. In conclusion, Local products are not being purchased by people because Large organisation are spending astronomical fund on promoting and selling the item. People can be informed about this product by offering them samples,
Trade and commerce play an
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important
role in economic development.
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Big
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companies
allocate a massive amount for selling and distribution of their new
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product
, whereas, individuals
are tempted
for purchasing this
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item
. In the market
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items
produce by the other manufacturing entities will be unsold and in order promote
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product
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be offered
a sample.

Due to the large manufacturer exists in the society,
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small
industries are suffering as their
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products
are not being
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purchased
by the
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people
. The demand created by marketing by the multinational
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companies
is forcing citizens to
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purchase
their
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product
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only
and the other tiny traders are not able to survive in the market as their
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item
is not in demand and it is not
being sold
.
For instance
, In India, LG electronics are selling their
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items
all the provinces.
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But
the
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Geepas
Ltd.
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Local
brand are not able to sell as they are not able to afford additional cost of marketing.

Furthermore
,
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products
produced by the native industries can
be promoted
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only
by explaining the
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people
about the
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items
. Offering the public free samples to
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use
it and
also
to
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check
the durability.
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Local
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people
have already
been lured
to
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buy
expensive
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items
of
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Big
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companies and
they will
surely
not
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buy
the
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local
produce
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item
.
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So
the
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people
can
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test
the free
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product
at home and after knowing the power of the
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item
.
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People
will understand the real value of
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local
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product
and
also
the price.
Next
time when they need to
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purchase
public will opt for the native
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item
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because
of the reliability and
also
the price.
For instance
,
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Geepas
Ltd produces home appliance which is 35%cheaper compared to the LG electronic as the addition amount of marketing is
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added
to price to recover from the customer.

In conclusion
,
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Local
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products
are not being
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purchased
by
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people
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because
Large
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organisation
are spending astronomical fund on promoting and selling the
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item
.
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People
can
be informed
about this
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product
by offering them samples,
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Large business have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause? What could be done to encourage people to buy local products? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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