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Some people consider price as most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (e. g medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people consider price as most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (e. g medical treatment). v. 1
Price of any item is considered to be the most important factor to make a decision to buy a certain product such as mobile phone or any kind of service which may be a medical treatment also. I believe that making a decision to buy any item should depend on the necessity of the product rather than its price. On the one hand, purchasing any item, which is not really required, just by looking at the lower or discounted price result in unnecessary spending. For instance, these days, online shopping sites are trending all over the world and such sites give a huge discount during festival sales, which usually make any shopaholic person to get attracted towards these items and most of the time those person end up buying the items without even realizing the actual need of it. This result in wastage of the hard-earned money. Additionally, few products are used just to fulfil the basic purpose, so one should not splurge their hard-earned money by buying expensive items until and unless they are sure about using its additional features. On the other hand, people sometimes need to buy few things which are absolutely necessary for their livings like medical help and good education. Paying huge amount for such things will always provide good returns in the future, therefore an individual should not think about the price before buying these. In other words, people should always look for the best when it comes to the necessities of life, without which somebody cannot survive or lead a good life. Education is one such thing as youth who get good education will get better career options and will be able to earn better than those who did not complete a course because of its higher fees. In conclusion, while people ought to think about the cost of products before making any purchase, I think price should only be taken into account after considering the item's necessity.
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Price
of any
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item
is considered
to be the most
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important
factor to
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make
a decision to
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buy
a certain
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product
such as mobile phone or any kind of service which may be a medical treatment
also
. I believe that making a decision to
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buy
any
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item
should depend on the necessity of the
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product
rather
than its price.

On the one hand, purchasing any
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item
, which is not
really
required,
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just
by looking at the lower or discounted
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price
result in unnecessary spending.
For instance
, these days, online shopping sites are trending all over the world and such sites give a huge discount during festival sales, which
usually
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make
any shopaholic person to
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get
attracted towards these
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items
and most of the time those person
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end
up buying the
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items
without even realizing the actual need of it. This result in wastage of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
-earned money.
Additionally
, few
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products
are
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used
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just
to fulfil the basic purpose,
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so
one should not splurge their
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hard
-earned money by buying expensive
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items
until and unless they are sure about using its additional features.

On the other hand
,
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people
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sometimes
need to
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buy
few things which are
absolutely
necessary for their livings like medical
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help
and
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good
education. Paying huge amount for such things will always provide
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good
The usual collocation for "returns" is "to" not "in" with. Did you mean "returns to"?
returns in
the future,
therefore
an individual should not
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think
about the
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price
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before
buying these.
In other words
,
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people
should always look for the best when it
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comes
to the necessities of life, without which somebody cannot survive or lead a
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good
life. Education is one such thing as youth who
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get
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good
education will
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get
better career options and will be able to earn better than those who did not complete a course
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because
of its higher fees.

In conclusion
, while
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people
ought to
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think
about the cost of
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products
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before
making any
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purchase
, I
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think
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price
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
be taken
into account after considering the item's necessity.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people consider price as most important thing to think about when buying product (such as cell phone) or service (e. g medical treatment). v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
325 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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