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Juvenile crime is attributed to the violence in media. Do you agree or disagree? What are the solutions? v.2

Juvenile crime is attributed to the violence in media. What are the solutions? v. 2
MEDIA PEOPLE DEPICTING MORE CRIME ATTEMPTED BY OFFSPRINGS. THIS ESSAY CONCUR AND DISCUSS VARIOUS SOLUTIONS TO TACKLE THIS PROBLEM. TO START WITH, FROM AN INDIVIDUAL POINT OF VIEW, CHILDREN DO CRIME BECAUSE OF LACK OF KNOWLEDGE AND UNDERSTANDING ABOUT LIFE. SO, PARENT SHOULD HAVE MORE CONCERN ABOUT THEIR CHILD, DO THEIR PROPER UPBRINGING AND TEACH THEM HOW TO BE A GOOD MEMBER OF THE SOCIETY AS WELL AS A CITIZEN. FOR AN EXAMPLE, MY NEIGHBOR'S SON ATTEMPTED ROBBERY WHEN HE WAS 15 YEAR OLD BECAUSE THEY DID NOT TEACH THEIR OFFSPRING ABOUT AWAFUL BEHAVIOUR AND WHAT ARE THE RESULTS OF COMMITTING OFFENCE. THUS, PARENTS SHOULD GUIDE THEM BY BEING FRIENDLY AND OPEN-MINDED WITH TODAY'S GENERATION. AS A RESULT, THERE WILL BE DECREASE CRIME. MOREOVER, GOVERNMENT ALSO DO SOME PROGRAMS LIKE OPEN A REHABILITATION CENTERS IN WHICH OFFENDERS CAN GET INFORMATION ABOUT GOOD BEHAVIOUR AND HOW TO GET RID OF BAD HABITS. TO ELABORATE, AUTHORITY SHOULD IMPLEMENT STRICT RULES LIKE REHABILITATION IS MANDATORY FOR ALL CRIMINALS AND ANY KIND OF CRIMES. FOR AN INSTANCE, IF ONE IS A MURDERER AND OTHER HAVE DONE ROBBERY THAN THERE ARE NO EXEMPTION FOR RUBBERS JUST BECAUSE THEY ARE JUST A THIEF. THIS APPROACH ENCOURAGE EXCITED CRIMINALS TO BE A RESPONSIBLE MEMBER OF THE NATION. IN ADDITION TO THIS, ALSO THERE SHOULD BE SOME RESTRICTIONS FOR MEDIA PEOPLE. TO ILLUSTRATE, LAWS IN WHICH THEY HAVE THE BOUNDARIES AND DUTIES MENTION. SO THAT, THEY KNOW WHAT NEWS THEY MAY PUBLISH AND WHAT NOT. FOR AN EXAMPLE, IF THEY GET A NEWS SUCH AS, ONE SCHOOLER HAS ATTEMPTED THEFT. THEN, THE MEDIA UNALLOWED TO TELECAST THIS NEWS ON THE TELEVISION. BECAUSE IT WILL INFLUENCE MANY OTHER STUDENTS TOO. BUT IF THEY GET THE INFORMATION as RAPE HAS ATTEMPTED BY 25-YEAR-OLD BOY, THEN THEY SHOULD SHOW THE NEWS BECAUSE THIS MAKES PUBLIC AWARE OF CURRENTS SITUATION. TO SUM UP, HOWEVER, MEDIA SHOULD indeed HAVE RIGHT TO PUBLISH ANY CRIME. BUT, I THINK WITH JUVENILE THEY SHOULD BE MORE CAREFUL ABOUT WHEN AND WHAT TO SHOW. EVERYONE IS RESPONSIBLE TO MAKE SOME CHANGES IN THE COUNTRY.
MEDIA
PEOPLE
DEPICTING MORE
CRIME
ATTEMPTED
BY
OFFSPRINGS
.
THIS ESSAY CONCUR
AND DISCUSS VARIOUS SOLUTIONS TO TACKLE THIS PROBLEM. TO
START
WITH, FROM AN INDIVIDUAL POINT OF VIEW, CHILDREN DO
CRIME
BECAUSE
OF LACK OF KNOWLEDGE AND UNDERSTANDING ABOUT LIFE.
SO
, PARENT SHOULD HAVE MORE CONCERN ABOUT THEIR CHILD, DO THEIR PROPER UPBRINGING AND TEACH THEM HOW TO BE A
GOOD
MEMBER OF THE SOCIETY
AS WELL
AS A CITIZEN. FOR AN EXAMPLE, MY NEIGHBOR'S SON
ATTEMPTED
ROBBERY WHEN HE WAS 15 YEAR
OLD
BECAUSE
THEY DID NOT TEACH THEIR OFFSPRING ABOUT
AWAFUL
BEHAVIOUR
AND WHAT ARE THE RESULTS OF COMMITTING
OFFENCE
.
THUS
, PARENTS SHOULD GUIDE THEM BY BEING FRIENDLY AND OPEN-MINDED WITH
TODAY
'S GENERATION.
AS A RESULT
, THERE WILL BE DECREASE CRIME.

MOREOVER
,
GOVERNMENT
ALSO
DO
SOME
PROGRAMS LIKE OPEN A REHABILITATION CENTERS IN WHICH OFFENDERS CAN
GET
INFORMATION ABOUT
GOOD
BEHAVIOUR
AND HOW TO
GET
RID OF
BAD
HABITS. TO ELABORATE, AUTHORITY SHOULD IMPLEMENT STRICT
RULES
LIKE REHABILITATION IS MANDATORY FOR ALL CRIMINALS AND ANY KIND OF
CRIMES
. FOR AN INSTANCE, IF ONE IS A MURDERER AND OTHER HAVE DONE ROBBERY THAN THERE ARE NO EXEMPTION FOR RUBBERS
JUST
BECAUSE
THEY ARE
JUST
A THIEF. THIS APPROACH ENCOURAGE EXCITED CRIMINALS TO BE A RESPONSIBLE MEMBER OF THE NATION.

IN ADDITION
TO THIS,
ALSO
THERE SHOULD BE
SOME
RESTRICTIONS FOR
MEDIA
PEOPLE
. TO ILLUSTRATE, LAWS IN WHICH THEY HAVE THE BOUNDARIES AND DUTIES MENTION.
SO
THAT, THEY KNOW WHAT
NEWS
THEY MAY PUBLISH AND WHAT NOT. FOR AN EXAMPLE, IF THEY
GET
A
NEWS
SUCH AS, ONE SCHOOLER HAS
ATTEMPTED
THEFT. THEN, THE
MEDIA
UNALLOWED
TO TELECAST THIS
NEWS
ON THE TELEVISION.
BECAUSE
IT WILL INFLUENCE
MANY
OTHER STUDENTS TOO.
BUT
IF THEY
GET
THE INFORMATION as RAPE HAS
ATTEMPTED
BY 25-YEAR-
OLD
BOY, THEN THEY SHOULD
SHOW
THE
NEWS
BECAUSE
THIS
MAKES
PUBLIC AWARE OF CURRENTS SITUATION.

TO SUM UP,
HOWEVER
,
MEDIA
SHOULD
indeed
HAVE RIGHT TO PUBLISH ANY
CRIME
.
BUT
, I
THINK
WITH JUVENILE THEY SHOULD BE MORE CAREFUL ABOUT WHEN AND WHAT TO
SHOW
. EVERYONE IS RESPONSIBLE TO
MAKE
SOME
CHANGES
IN THE COUNTRY.
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IELTS essay Juvenile crime is attributed to the violence in media. What are the solutions? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
347 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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