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it. It arise to many issues and troubles. In this modern era, technology has advanced to a level that is beyond imagination. Certain employers are of the view that, they should remain in contact with the employee all the week around. This essay will discuss the merits and demerits that are associated with it. v.1

it. It arise to many issues and troubles. In this modern era, technology has advanced to a level that is beyond imagination. Certain employers are of the view that, they should remain in contact with the employee all the week around. This essay will discuss the merits and demerits that are associated with it. v. 1
Many complications are associated with it. It arise to many issues and troubles. In this modern era, technology has advanced to a level that is beyond imagination. Certain employers are of the view that, they should remain in contact with the employee all the week around. This essay will discuss the merits and demerits that are associated with it. Should a person work throughout the week? It is a debatable issue. Man is a social animal, but he is not a machine. Although work and money plays a vital role in life, still it should not be done in excess that it becomes a burden in mind. Working throughout the week will affect the employee physical and mental health. For instance, in a survey conducted by the government of India, it was found that if a person works more than five days, then there are more chances that he would be in depression. Furthermore, communication with the boss on holidays with respect to work, will create serious problems in the person's life. He would not be able to give his precious time to his family, as a result, there are more chances of drift in between the families. It is good to be workaholic, but to some extent till it doesn't affect the life of the employee. Today there is cut throat competition in every field, and it is very difficult to survive without monetary help as well as exceptional relationships with the employer is mandatory. Whether it is night or weekend, if the employer communicates with employee then it would be really beneficial for him. As his dedication towards the work will not be judged anymore, and he would be considered as an asset to the company. Moreover, there are more chances of promotion of the employee if he gives more than adequate time to the organization. Overall, it would be a win-win situation for both of them. To conclude, this essay has discussed the merits and demerits of engagement of employee and the boss even on non working days. The communication technology is a great boom for both of them, however the detrimental effects are far way ahead than the merits.
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Many
complications
are associated
with it. It
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arise
to
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many
issues and troubles. In this modern era, technology has advanced to a level
that is
beyond imagination. Certain employers are of the view that, they should remain in contact with the
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employee
all the week around. This essay will discuss the merits and demerits that
are associated
with it.

Should a person
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work
throughout the week? It is a debatable issue.
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Man
is a social animal,
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but
he is not a machine. Although
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
and money plays a vital role in life,
still
it should not
be done
in excess that it becomes a burden in mind. Working throughout the week will affect the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employee
physical and mental health.
For instance
, in a survey conducted by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
of India, it
was found
that if a person works more than five days, then there are more chances that he would be in depression.
Furthermore
, communication with the boss on holidays with respect to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
, will create serious problems in the person's life. He would not be able to give his precious time to his family,
as a result
, there are more chances of drift in between the families. It is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
to be workaholic,
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but
to
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some
extent till it doesn't affect the life of the employee.

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Today
there is
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cut throat
competition in every field, and it is
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very
difficult to survive without monetary
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help
as well
as exceptional relationships with the employer is mandatory. Whether it is night or weekend, if the employer communicates with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employee
then it would be
really
beneficial for him. As his dedication towards the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
will not
be judged
anymore, and he would
be considered
as an asset to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.
Moreover
, there are more chances of promotion of the
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employee
if he gives more than adequate time to the organization.
Overall
, it would be a win-win situation for both of them.

To conclude
, this essay has discussed the merits and demerits of engagement of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employee
and the boss even on
It appears that a hyphen is missing.
non working
days. The communication technology is a great boom for both of them,
however
the detrimental effects are
Please check whether an article is missing: "a far".
far
way
Use "(ahead)" to make a comparison with this adjective.
ahead
than the merits.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay it. It arise to many issues and troubles. In this modern era, technology has advanced to a level that is beyond imagination. Certain employers are of the view that, they should remain in contact with the employee all the week around. This essay will discuss the merits and demerits that are associated with it. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
363 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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