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It is widely acknowledged that gigantic amount of rubbish is producing every day. Huge wastage is a concerning problem in both the developed and developing v.1

It is widely acknowledged that gigantic amount of rubbish is producing every day. Huge wastage is a concerning problem in both the developed and developing v. 1
It is widely acknowledged that huge amount of rubbish is produced every day. Wastage is a concerning problem in both the developed and developing countries. This essay will discuss reasons for increase in waste production and also suggest some possible measure to alleviate the garbage. Firstly, the packaging is the major cause for enormous production of rubbish. Whether it is necessary or not, large companies will attract the customers with packaging. The material used for packaging is not non-biodegradable and will get accumulated in bulk over a period of time. Secondly, humans are pleasure seekers, they have adopted used and through policy. People are acquiring new products instead of repairing the older or obsolete items, which otherwise doubling up the same. Some of the companies warranty also will be for a shorter period of time, after that people are no longer interested in repairing the commodity, as a result production of rubbish increasing tremendously. Another key point is that, increasing technology is one of the major factors for immense garbage. People are updated to new products every day, cell phones are the best example sophisticated technology. Turning to the possible solution, the government should start implementing strict laws for manufacturing biodegradable products for packaging and designing. The warranty should be for a longer period so that the consumers can repair and reuse it. Furthermore regular up gradation of technology should be adopted at regular intervals. To conclude, though the government authorities have passed many orders, it is not easy to eradicate wastage. It’s the people who should stop over consumerism and start recycling and bio degradable products
It is
widely
acknowledged that huge amount of rubbish
is produced
every day. Wastage is a concerning problem in both the developed and
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developing countries
. This essay will discuss reasons for increase in waste production and
also
suggest
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some
possible measure to alleviate the garbage.

Firstly
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
packaging
is the major cause for enormous production of rubbish. Whether it is necessary or not, large
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
will attract the customers with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
packaging
. The material
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used
for
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packaging
is not non-biodegradable and will
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get
accumulated in bulk over a period of time.

Secondly
, humans are pleasure seekers, they have adopted
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used
and through policy.
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People
are acquiring new
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products
instead
of repairing the older or obsolete items, which
otherwise
doubling up the same.
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
Some of the
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companies
warranty
also
will be for a shorter period of time, after that
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people
are no longer interested in repairing the commodity,
as a result
production of rubbish increasing
tremendously
.

Another key point is that, increasing technology is one of the major factors for immense garbage.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
People
are updated
to new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
every day, cell phones are the best example sophisticated technology.

Turning to the possible solution, the
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government
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
implementing strict laws for manufacturing biodegradable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
packaging
and designing. The warranty should be for a longer period
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that the consumers can repair and reuse it.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Furthermore
regular up gradation of technology should
be adopted
at regular intervals.

To conclude
, though the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
authorities have passed
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
orders, it is not easy to eradicate wastage. It’s the
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people
who should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
over consumerism and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
recycling and bio degradable
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products
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay It is widely acknowledged that gigantic amount of rubbish is producing every day. Huge wastage is a concerning problem in both the developed and developing v. 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
266 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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