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Some people are born to be a leader, others believe that leadership can be learned, Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people are born to be a leader, others believe that leadership can be learned, v. 1
Leadership is seen as an inborn feature at people to some. Others, however, insist that it can be acquired and learned throughout one's life. Although there exist strong arguments on both sides, here, I consider the real leadership to be the matter of talent only. On the one hand, there exists a certain chance to acquire leadership skills in an academic environment. Most of the Bussiness Administration Courses conducted globally prove this to be the case. By attending them, future managers can learn various techniques to lead their prospective staff properly. Skills like persuading people to one's viewpoints, maintaining the subordination between the staff and administration are taught well in such modules. To be a good leader, the aforementioned skills can come invaluable. On the other hand, certain qualities granted by the almighty at birth seem to be vital for a successful leader. This seems fully justifiable to me too. Most of the brilliant leaders of history had something unique about themselves. With his charisma and powerful speeches, Martin Luther King Jr. was able to win the hearts of even very strong supporters of segregation, for instance. He was a leader of the pacifist movement against racism in the U. S. back then. Moreover, despite his physical handicap due to polio, Franklin Delano Rosevelt managed to urge the Americans to be as persistent and hardworking as him. This pulled the nation through the Great Depression and World War II during his presidency. In my opinion, leadership to this level has to be something innate. To conclude, there might exist certain environments which, actually, teach people to become a leader. However, a real leader has to possess qualities like charisma, perseverance and good speech-making abilities. In my view, people can only be born this these
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. Others,
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, insist that it can
be acquired
and learned throughout one's life. Although there exist strong arguments on both sides, here, I consider the real
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leadership
to be the matter of talent
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only
.

On the one hand, there exists a certain chance to acquire
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leadership
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skills
in an academic environment. Most of the
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Bussiness
Administration Courses conducted globally prove this to be the case. By attending them, future managers can learn various techniques to lead their prospective staff
properly
.
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Skills
like persuading
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people
to one's viewpoints, maintaining the subordination between the staff and administration
are taught
well in such modules. To be a
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good
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leader
, the aforementioned
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skills
can
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come
invaluable.

On the other hand
, certain qualities granted by the almighty at birth seem to be vital for a successful
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leader
. This seems
fully
justifiable to me too. Most of the brilliant
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leaders
of history had something unique about themselves. With his charisma and powerful speeches, Martin Luther King Jr. was able to win the hearts of even
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very
strong supporters of segregation,
for instance
. He was a
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leader
of the pacifist movement against racism in the U. S. back then.
Moreover
, despite his physical handicap due to polio, Franklin Delano
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Rosevelt
managed to urge the Americans to be as persistent and hardworking as him. This pulled the nation through the Great Depression and World War II during his presidency. In my opinion,
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leadership
to this level
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has to
be something innate.

To conclude
, there might exist certain environments which, actually, teach
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people
to become a
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leader
.
However
, a real
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leader
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has to
possess qualities like charisma, perseverance and
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good
speech-making abilities. In my view,
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people
can
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only
be born
this
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IELTS essay Some people are born to be a leader, others believe that leadership can be learned, v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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