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It is very important for students to learn as much as possible before their graduation from university For this reason many schools require students to attend all of their classes in person in order to achieve a passing score Do you agree or disagree with v.1

It is very important for students to learn as much as possible before their graduation from university For this reason many schools require students to attend all of their classes in person in order to achieve a passing score with v. 1
It’s a popular point that children should always follow their parents’ advice, especially in Eastern countries. Due to the fact that all parents always hope the best things for their kids, their guidance is useful and necessary. However, the world is changing everyday, some thinking of parents maybe not suitable anymore. I believe that we should have a right attitude to decide whether an advice is right to follow or not. First, parents’ advice is very valuable. Parents have a lot of experience in life, and they always want to give their children the best things with love. Besides, kids grow up with their parents’ teaching, so their fathers or mothers know what is good for them. Also, one person’s decision, especially a young person who still depends on their parents, maybe be relevant to his family’s ability of money. At this time, following his parents’ advice to receive supporting is important. For example, one wants to go to a university that his parents do not like, he might obey his father or mother’s recommendation and choose another university to still receive money from his family. In the other side, people should think carefully before choosing to follow their parents’ advice or not, because not every opinion is suitable. Some parents have a generation gap with their children. Their thinking maybe outdated, and knowledge they know could not be right anymore now because life condition now is different from the old days. For example, some parents tell their daughters not to go to university because they still believe that women only need to do the household well. These wrong thinking can destroy a person’s future. At this time, what people should do is to sit down and have a serious talk about what they want and the reasons of their parents’ advice. By this way, people can receive the best guidance for their life. In conclusion, people should receive advice selectively. Parents sometimes could give wrong opinions because of many reasons, but they always want to support and give the best things to their kids. Listening to them carefully and considering what is suitable for own condition, this is the best way to do.
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parents’
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advice
,
especially
in Eastern countries. Due to the fact that all
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parents
always hope the
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best
things for their kids, their guidance is useful and necessary.
However
, the world is changing
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everyday
,
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some
thinking of
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parents
maybe not suitable anymore. I believe that we should have a right attitude to decide whether an
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advice
is right to follow or not.

First
,
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parents’
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advice
is
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very
valuable.
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have
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a lot of
experience in life, and they always
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want
to give their children the
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best
things with
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love
.
Besides
, kids grow up with their
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parents’
teaching,
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so
their fathers or mothers know what is
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good
for them.
Also
, one person’s decision,
especially
a young person who
still
depends on their
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parents
, maybe be relevant to his family’s ability of money. At this time, following his
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parents’
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advice
to
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receive
supporting is
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important
.
For example
, one
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wants
to go to a university that his
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parents
do not like, he might obey his father or mother’s recommendation and choose another university to
still
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receive
money from his family.

In the other side,
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people
should
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think
carefully
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before
choosing to follow their
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parents’
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advice
or not,
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because
not every opinion is suitable.
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Some
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parents
have a generation gap with their children. Their thinking maybe outdated, and knowledge they know could not be right anymore
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now
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because
life condition
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now
is
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different
from the
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old
days.
For example
,
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some
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parents
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tell
their daughters not to go to university
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because
they
still
believe that women
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only
need to do the household well. These
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wrong
thinking can
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destroy
a person’s future. At this time, what
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people
should do is to sit down and have a serious talk about what they
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want
and the reasons of their
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parents’
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advice
. By this way,
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people
can
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receive
the
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best
guidance for their life.

In conclusion
,
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people
should
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receive
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advice
selectively
.
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Parents
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sometimes
could give
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wrong
opinions
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because
of
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many
reasons,
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but
they always
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want
to support and give the
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best
things to their kids. Listening to them
carefully
and considering what is suitable for
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own
condition, this is the
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best
way to do.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
Language comes first. It’s not that language grows out of consciousness, if you haven’t got language, you can’t be conscious.
Alan Moore

IELTS essay It is very important for students to learn as much as possible before their graduation from university For this reason many schools require students to attend all of their classes in person in order to achieve a passing score with v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
364 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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