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It is very important for students to learn as much as possible before their graduation from university For this reason many schools require students to attend all of their classes in person in order to achieve a passing score Do you agree or disagree with v.2

It is very important for students to learn as much as possible before their graduation from university For this reason many schools require students to attend all of their classes in person in order to achieve a passing score with v. 2
I feel that pressuring the students to go to school in order to prepare than for the university, will not work. There are other ways to prepare the students to attend the university, like improving the regular tests at school. It does not matter, if this students came to all the classes or not! What really matters is, if they will be able to passing the tests with a high score. Unfortunately, when I was in a regular school, I did not have a chance to choose between going or not to school. Because in native country we need to frequent the school everyday. Nonetheless, when I was in high school, there was a lot of classes that I did not want to go. Especially, when I did not like the teacher’s method, I felt a waste of time! I would prefer to stay studying at home. Really, I could learning more effective studying by myself. But, here in Brazil, I could not do this and when I came back home I had to spend a lot time in order to learn the subject already teached at school. Because, I also need to get a high score in the tests. Definitely, forcing the students to go to school is not a good idea. Actually, we have two different sort of kids which do not want to go there. First, the ones that like to study at home but getting high scores on the tests. Secondly, the ones that do not want to go to school, neither do not like to study at home. So, if the last one have the obligation to go to school, likely they will disturb the learning process of the others. For example, when I was in the middle school, there was a kid, his name is Diego, which was talking, making jokes and running in our classes, literally by full time. He was always annoying the students that really want to pay attention in class. I guess, my classes would be best if was possibly him did not go to school. Me and my colleagues was feel thankful. For those reasons, I think that giving freedom for the students decide among watch the classes or not. It is the better way the keep the quality of education because we are unique and each of us have our best way to learn.
I feel that pressuring the
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students
to go to
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school
in order to prepare than for the university, will not work. There are other ways to prepare the
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students
to attend the university, like improving the regular
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tests
at
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school
. It does not matter, if this
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students
came to all the
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classes
or not! What
really
matters is, if they will be able to passing the
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tests
with a
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high
score.

Unfortunately, when I was in a regular
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school
, I did not have a chance to choose between going or not to
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school
.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
in native country we need to frequent the
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school
'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean "every day"?
everyday
. Nonetheless, when I was in
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high
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school
, there was
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a lot of
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classes
that I did not
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want
to go.
Especially
, when I did not like the teacher’s method, I felt a waste of time! I would prefer to stay studying at home.
Really
, I could
The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: "learn"
learning
more effective studying by myself.
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But
, here in Brazil, I could not do this and when I came back home I had to spend
If you mean a great quantity, use "a lot of time"?
a lot time
in order to learn the subject already
Possible spelling mistake. Did you mean "taught", the past tense form of the verb 'teach'?
teached
at
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school
.
“Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
, I
also
need to
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get
a
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high
score in the
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tests
.

Definitely, forcing the
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students
to go to
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school
is not a
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good
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idea
. Actually, we have two
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different
Possible agreement error. The noun 'sort' seems to be countable, so consider using: "sorts".
sort
of kids which do not
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want
to go there.
First
, the
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ones
that like to study at home
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but
getting
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high
scores on the
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tests
.
Secondly
, the
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ones
that do not
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want
to go to
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school
, neither do not like to study at home.
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So
, if the last one have the obligation to go to
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school
, likely they will disturb the learning process of the others.
For example
, when I was in the middle
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school
, there was a kid, his name is Diego, which was talking, making jokes and running in our
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classes
,
literally
by full time. He was always annoying the
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students
that
really
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want
to pay attention in
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class
. I guess, my
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classes
would
A determiner is probably missing here: "be the best".
be best
if was
possibly
him did not go to
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school
.
When referring to yourself and somebody else, put their name first. Also check whether the nominative form "I" is required here.
Me
and my colleagues was feel thankful.

For those reasons, I
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think
that giving freedom for the
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students
decide among
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watch
the
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classes
or not. It is the better way the
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keep
the quality of education
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because
we are unique and each of us have our best way to learn.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay It is very important for students to learn as much as possible before their graduation from university For this reason many schools require students to attend all of their classes in person in order to achieve a passing score with v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
396 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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