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It is very important for people to be able to speak more than one language. therefore, children should start learning a foreign language as young as possible. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

It is very important for people to be able to speak more than one language. therefore, children should start learning a foreign language as young as possible. v. 1
In contemporary times, certain people are travelling more frequently than a decade ago. It is owing to the fact that travel has become much cheaper and easy with numerous transportation options. This essay will discuss firstly, why many people are inclined towards trips now than earlier and secondly, how short breaks will benefit travellers in their lives, followed by a reasoned conclusion. To embark on, few people are fascinated about taking breaks once in a while in order to overcome the sedentary lifestyle they have developed due to long hectic working schedules or meetings. Moreover, with the increase in technology and improvements in transportation, people are able to travel to the world's best tourist spots in a span of hours in a very reasonable cost. For instance, a few years ago, it was difficult to travel to Andaman due to the lack of means of transport and now it has become most visited holiday spots because of increase in flights and improvements in ways of transport. Also, with the increase in the number of travel agencies and tourism websites, people are travelling smoothly by availing the enticing offers they provide. As a result, travelling to different places have become much easier and in turn would help people in changing their perspective towards life. Furthermore, short trips will always give relief to every individual and help them rejuvenate their energy when they return to work. When people travel they will always get a chance to explore new places, culture, language, traditions, lifestyle and food habits and ultimately which help them in many ways in their lives. For example, nowadays, travel bloggers have been increasing tremendously in social media, which helps people to know about the culture and lifestyle of the place beforehand. Also, travelling help them to improve their prospect towards life and problems because they would get a chance to meet different people, which would help them to understand how to handle different situations in life. Consequently, this would help them to become an ideal person with great thoughts and provide the best approach towards life. In conclusion, with the improvements in technology, it has become much easier for people to travel to different places and explore those places which would help them to become a better individual in their life.
In contemporary times, certain
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people
are
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travelling
more
frequently
than a decade ago. It is owing to the fact that
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travel
has
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become
much cheaper and easy with numerous transportation options. This essay will discuss
firstly
, why
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many
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people
are inclined
towards trips
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now
than earlier and
secondly
, how short breaks will benefit
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travellers
in their
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lives
, followed by a reasoned conclusion.

To embark on, few
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people
are fascinated
about taking breaks once in a while in order to overcome the sedentary lifestyle they have developed due to long hectic working schedules or meetings.
Moreover
, with the increase in technology and improvements in transportation,
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people
are able to
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travel
to the world's best tourist spots in a span of hours in a
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very
reasonable cost.
For instance
, a few years ago, it was difficult to
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travel
to Andaman due to the lack of means of transport and
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now
it has
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become
most visited holiday spots
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because
of increase in flights and improvements in ways of transport.
Also
, with the increase in the number of
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travel
agencies and tourism websites,
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people
are
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travelling
smoothly
by availing the enticing offers they provide.
As a result
,
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travelling
to
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different
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places
have
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become
much easier and in turn would
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help
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people
in changing their perspective towards life.

Furthermore
, short trips will always give relief to every individual and
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help
them rejuvenate their energy when they return to work. When
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people
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travel
they will always
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get
a chance to explore new
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places
, culture, language, traditions, lifestyle and food habits and
ultimately
which
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help
them in
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many
ways in their
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lives
.
For example
, nowadays,
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travel
bloggers have been increasing
tremendously
in social media, which
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helps
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people
to know about the culture and lifestyle of the
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place
beforehand.
Also
,
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travelling
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help
them to
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improve
their prospect towards life and problems
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because
they would
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get
a chance to
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meet
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different
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people
, which would
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help
them to understand how to handle
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different
situations in life.
Consequently
, this would
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help
them to
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become
an ideal person with great thoughts and provide the best approach towards life.

In conclusion
, with the improvements in technology, it has
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become
much easier for
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people
to
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travel
to
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different
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places
and explore those
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places
which would
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help
them to
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become
a better individual in their life.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay It is very important for people to be able to speak more than one language. therefore, children should start learning a foreign language as young as possible. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
381 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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