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it is thought by some dirty school teachers role is to motivate and inspire student. However, other people believe that teachers primary role is to pass on knowledgeWhat do you think is the role of teacher v.1

it is thought by some dirty school teachers role is to motivate and inspire student. However, other people believe that teachers primary role is to pass on knowledgeWhat do you think is the role of teacher v. 1
One school of thought suggests that adapting and accepting to bad situations like having unsuitable job or shortage of money is logical, while, another view is that trying to better condition is better. I definitely hold that people should struggle with bad state of affairs and improve them. Up to the understanding of some people, the best choice is to adapt to bad situations like job unsatisfactory or lack of money. Not motivating, they deem into this idea which all of the individuals should not squander their time and energy to improve their bad situations. These people reckon that the most important factor is to have jobs which are prepared by others because not only do they have a chance in their life, but also in many cases their heritage makes them have plenty of opportunities. So, they can make risk and waste their money without having any futuristic troubles. Beside, there is risk of redundancy if they want to face them at risk for jobs in which they interest or make money. On the contrary, there are others which concentrate on job fulfilment and wealth. Employing their adroitness, these people have a tendency to struggle with stumbling blocks to make opportunities. Not only do they are dexterous, but also they make use of their knowledge towards wise decisions which bring them new chances and wealth. For motivating they focus on dozens of the individuals such as Trump or Jobs which they went out of business, but they could find the way of success which not only will they satisfy by their occupation, but also make them millionaire. To sum up, although there are some people who are fearing of risks they may encounter in the future due to altering their situations, there are whom work for making better chances and I strongly support the latter idea.
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suggests that adapting and accepting to
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job
or shortage of money is logical, while, another view is that trying to better condition is better. I definitely hold that
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people
should struggle with
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bad
state of affairs and
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some
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people
, the best choice is to adapt to
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bad
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situations
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job
unsatisfactory or lack of money. Not motivating, they deem into this
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idea
which
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individuals should not squander their time and energy to
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reckon that the most
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jobs
which
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and waste their money without having any futuristic troubles. Beside, there is
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risk
of redundancy if they want to face them at
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for
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jobs
in which they interest or
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make
money.

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, there are others which concentrate on
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and wealth. Employing their adroitness, these
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opportunities. Not
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do they are dexterous,
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they
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of their knowledge towards wise decisions which bring them new chances and wealth. For motivating they focus on dozens of the individuals such as Trump or
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Jobs
which they went out of business,
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but
they could find the way of success which not
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only
will they satisfy by their occupation,
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also
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make
them millionaire.

To sum up, although there are
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people
who are fearing of
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situations
, there are whom work for making better chances and I
strongly
support the latter
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IELTS essay it is thought by some dirty school teachers role is to motivate and inspire student. However, other people believe that teachers primary role is to pass on knowledgeWhat do you think is the role of teacher v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
307 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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