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It is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married beforethey are 30, as this is best both for individual and for society. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

It is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married beforethey are 30, as this is best both for individual and for society. v. 2
To bring stability in life, marriage is the most important step need to be taken. But, the correct time to take this step is the major question arise in front of everyone. In my opinion, the best time for an individual to do marriage is before 30 which also satisfy the standards of society too. While entering into a new phase of life through marriage, compatibility is mandatory. Growing age proportionally enhances the maturity of a person. A matured person always try to find out perfection in each aspect. It is not possible for anyone to be perfect all the time. If one is 100% perfect then he can be considered as God. In addition to this, bringing stability into life would be very difficult without compatibility. Compatibility and cooperativeness between 2 people bring a sense of emotional satisfaction between them. And, a person who is not satisfied, will always remain unstable within the life span. Another unavoidable instance is of family planning. Marriage in early age can bring responsibilities towards the person which convince him to think about the children nurturing and upbringing like their studies, future planning etc. A person having less salary can easily improve himself by putting extraneous efforts towards work. This can prepare him to be a good and responsible person within the balanced family. To conclude, each aspect of life should take place in life at appropriate timings. Going school at the age of 30 is not acceptable, in the same way, taking a step of doing marriage in later age is unacceptable and can never lead to happiness. Living alone is not possible and if we wanted to walk far we have to walk together.
To bring stability in
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life
,
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marriage
is the most
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important
step need to
be taken
.
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But
, the correct time to take this step is the major question arise in front of everyone. In my opinion, the best time for an individual to do
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marriage
is
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before
30 which
also
satisfy the standards of society too.

While entering into a new phase of
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life
through
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marriage
, compatibility is mandatory. Growing
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age
proportionally
enhances the maturity of a
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person
. A matured
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person
always try to find out perfection in each aspect. It is not possible for anyone to be perfect all the time. If one is 100% perfect then he can
be considered
as God.
In addition
to this, bringing stability into
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life
would be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
difficult without compatibility. Compatibility and cooperativeness between 2
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
bring a sense of emotional satisfaction between them. And, a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
person
who is not satisfied, will always remain unstable within the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
span.

Another unavoidable instance is of family planning.
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Marriage
in early
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age
can bring responsibilities towards the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
person
which convince him to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
about the children nurturing and upbringing like their studies, future planning etc. A
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person
having less salary can
easily
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improve
himself by putting extraneous efforts towards work. This can prepare him to be a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
and responsible
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person
within the balanced family.

To conclude
, each aspect of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
should take place in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
at appropriate timings. Going school at the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
of 30 is not acceptable,
in the same way
, taking a step of doing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
marriage
in later
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
age
is unacceptable and can never lead to happiness. Living alone is not possible and if we wanted to walk far we
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
walk together.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay It is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married beforethey are 30, as this is best both for individual and for society. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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