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It is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married beforethey are 30, as this is best both for individual and for society. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

It is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married beforethey are 30, as this is best both for individual and for society. v. 1
Today, researching family genealogy is increasingly gaining popularity among people. The main reason behind this trend is curiosity and new technological advances. In my opinion, this is a positive development which helps people have a knowledge of family history and comes with health benefits. There are a growing number of people who are digging into their genealogical roots. The chief reason is that people are very curious about their family lineage. For example, before the technological developments, people used to listen to stories, which is told by their grandparents or parents, as to their family tree. In other words, people have relied on oral information whether is reliable or not, about family history. However, new technologies such as DNA and the internet allow people to access to accurate information about their family tree. Therefore, genealogical research has gained popularity. Tracing family lineage can be considered a positive development that provides reliable information and substantial health benefits. One of the greatest benefits of it is that people access to reliable the documented information about their ancestors, which are about who they are, where they lived, and whether they have fame or not and more. Even better, digging into a family tree can allow people to find inheritable diseases such as heart diseases, cancer, and obesity which are passed on from one generation to another. For instance, if a genetic disorder can be detected in family health history, people can effectively prepare for those possibilities. Thus, the popularity of genealogical research plays an important role in people’s lives. In conclusion, tracing family history is a growing trend among curious people. In my opinion, genealogical research is a positive development because it can greatly play an important role in people’s lives due to that it offers accurate information about family history as well as early diagnosis of inheritable diseases.
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genealogy is
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people
. The main reason behind this trend is curiosity and new technological advances. In my opinion, this is a
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positive
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development
which
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helps
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people
have a knowledge of
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family
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history
and
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comes
with health benefits.

There are a growing number of
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people
who are digging into their
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genealogical
roots. The chief reason is that
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people
are
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very
curious about their
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family
lineage.
For example
,
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before
the technological
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developments
,
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people
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used
to listen to stories, which is
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told
by their grandparents or parents, as to their
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family
tree.
In other words
,
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people
have relied on oral
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information
whether is reliable or not, about
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family
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history
.
However
, new technologies such as DNA and the internet
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allow
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people
to access to accurate
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information
about their
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family
tree.
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,
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genealogical
research has gained popularity.

Tracing
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family
lineage can
be considered
a
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positive
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development
that provides reliable
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information
and substantial health benefits. One of the greatest benefits of it is that
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people
access to reliable the documented
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information
about their ancestors, which are about who they are, where they
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lived
, and whether they have fame or not and more. Even better, digging into a
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family
tree can
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allow
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people
to find inheritable diseases such as heart diseases, cancer, and obesity which
are passed
on from one generation to another.
For instance
, if a genetic disorder can
be detected
in
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family
health
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history
,
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people
can
effectively
prepare for those possibilities.
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, the popularity of
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genealogical
research plays an
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important
role in
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people’s
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lives
.

In conclusion
, tracing
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family
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history
is a growing trend among curious
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people
. In my opinion,
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genealogical
research is a
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positive
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development
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because
it can
greatly
play an
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important
role in
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people’s
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lives
due to that it offers accurate
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information
about
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family
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history
as well
as early diagnosis of inheritable diseases.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay It is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married beforethey are 30, as this is best both for individual and for society. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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