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Some people choose a career according to the social status and salary it will give them. Others choose a career according to whether they will enjoy the work. So which do you think is the best way to choose career. Give reasons for your answers and include v.5

Some people choose a career according to the social status and salary it will give them. Others choose a career according to whether they will enjoy the work. So which do you think is the best way to choose career. 5
Nowadays, people are more career oriented. Everyone prefer life with better career opportunities along with handsome salaries. In my opinion, anything chosen with liking will always prove out to be better in life. We can only upscale ourselves if we enjoy the work we' re doing. Today, inflation has become a serious problem in everyone’s life. Due to high expenses, wage earning is necessary. A person living below poverty line is facing multiple problems like unable to buy good food or unable to feed their children etc. Due to monetary issues, people would not be able to study and making suicidal commits. But, a person is facing such issues because s/he nowhere have an interest in their work or doesn' t want to do work. If a person enjoy doing work, then only s/he can earn immensely and live with a better life style. For instance, considering a great business leader N. R. Narayana Murthy, chief emeritus of Infosys Ltd, always believed on one concept " simple living high thinking" . When he started his career, he had only Rs. 10, 000 which he borrowed from his wife. He loved the work he was doing and done with complete dedication Today, everybody knows his as the person who firstly done the evolution of Information technology in India. His learning, perseverance and dedication towards his interest took him towards the heights of glory. Today, this person is the member of committee which discusses the economy of India. These qualities have automatically provided him a better social status and ample amount of money In compendium, social status and salary are important but a person working with commitment will consequently get benefit out of it. The only ways to do great work is to love what you do because it is the only perspective which can truly satisfy you.
Nowadays,
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people
are more career oriented. Everyone
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prefer
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life
with
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better
career opportunities along with handsome salaries. In my opinion, anything chosen with liking will always prove out to be
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better
in
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life
. We can
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only
upscale ourselves if we enjoy the
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work
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re doing
.

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Today
, inflation has become a serious problem in everyone’s
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life
. Due to high expenses,
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wage earning
is necessary. A
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person
living below poverty line is facing multiple problems like unable to
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buy
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good
food or unable to feed their children etc. Due to monetary issues,
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people
would not be able to study and making suicidal commits.
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But
, a
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person
is facing such issues
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because
s/he nowhere
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have
an interest in their
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work
or
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doesn&
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If a
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person
enjoy doing
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work
, then
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only
s/he can earn
immensely
and
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live
with a
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better
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life
style.
For instance
, considering a great business leader N. R.
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Narayana
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Murthy
, chief emeritus of
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Infosys
Ltd, always believed on one concept
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&quot
; simple living high
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thinking&quot
;
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.
When he
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started
his career, he had
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only
Rs. 10, 000 which he borrowed from his wife. He
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loved
the
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work
he was doing and done with complete dedication
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Today
, everybody knows his as the
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person
who
firstly
done the evolution of Information technology in India. His learning, perseverance and dedication towards his interest took him towards the heights of glory.
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Today
, this
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person
is the member of committee which discusses the economy of India. These qualities have
automatically
provided him a
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better
social status and ample amount of
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money


In compendium, social status and salary are
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important
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but
a
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person
working with commitment will
consequently
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get
benefit out of it. The
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only
ways to do great
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work
is to
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love
what you do
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because
it is the
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only
perspective which can
truly
satisfy you.
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24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people choose a career according to the social status and salary it will give them. Others choose a career according to whether they will enjoy the work. So which do you think is the best way to choose career. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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