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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Being a celebrity - such as famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems? Give reasons for your answe v.80

Being a celebrity - such as famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems? Give reasons for your answe v. 80
Today, a lot of awareness towards society or religions is required within each and every person. Nowadays, media has become the major source of awareness. Famous personalities like film stars or sports personalities who are part of media can make people aware of various situations like problems in outside world or motivate the talented youth. Each and every person always try to imitate the famous celebrity. For instance, considering a famous tennis player, Sania Mirza. She won multiple awards not only at national level but at international level too which emboldened people more towards tennis. In ancient times, when people wanted to kill their daughter, today, everyone wanted their children to be a tennis player and enhance the value of their nation worldwide. A famous celebrity also helped people in learning their profession. Like, the famous personality, Milkha Singh also known as flying Sikh have opened an academy using his reward money. His achievements inspired and helped people to learn more about running skills. This leads to skill enhancement of youth from beginner to advanced and made them versatile. In contrast to benefits, there are certain problems too. Being a celebrity and having glamorous life always keep them highlighted in the eyes of terrorists. While having ample money, they get multiple ransom calls, which can eventually put them into egregious issues. But today, everyone has risks in their life. So development or growth of talented youth and nation is somewhere crucial than any other issue. To conclude, awareness is necessary for the development of a nation. Efforts of one can help or develop many. Dedication and hard work of youth can make them a famous celebrity which eventually uplift nation because genius is one percent inspiration and ninety-nine percent perspiration
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Today
,
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a lot of
awareness towards society or religions
is required
within each and every person. Nowadays, media has become the major source of awareness.
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Famous
personalities like film stars or sports personalities who are part of media can
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make
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people
aware of various situations like problems in outside world or motivate the talented youth.

Each and every person always try to imitate the
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famous
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celebrity
.
For instance
, considering a
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famous
tennis player,
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Sania
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Mirza
. She won multiple awards not
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only
at national level
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but
at international level too which emboldened
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people
more towards tennis. In ancient times, when
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people
wanted to kill their daughter,
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today
, everyone wanted their children to be a tennis player and enhance the value of their
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nation
worldwide.

A
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famous
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celebrity
also
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helped
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people
in learning their profession. Like, the
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famous
personality,
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Milkha
Singh
also
known as flying Sikh have opened an academy using his reward money. His achievements inspired and
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helped
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people
to learn more about running
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skills
. This leads to
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skill
enhancement of youth from beginner to advanced and made them versatile.

In contrast
to benefits, there are certain problems too. Being a
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celebrity
and having glamorous life always
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keep
them highlighted in the eyes of terrorists. While having ample money, they
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get
multiple ransom calls, which can
eventually
put them into egregious issues.
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But
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today
, everyone has
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risks
in their life.
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So
development or growth of talented youth and
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nation
is somewhere
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crucial
than any other issue.

To conclude
, awareness is necessary for the development of a
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nation
. Efforts of one can
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help
or develop
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many
. Dedication and
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hard
work of youth can
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make
them a
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famous
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celebrity
which
eventually
uplift
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nation
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because
genius is one percent inspiration and ninety-nine percent
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perspiration
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
If you talk to a man in a language he understands, that goes to his head. If you talk to him in his own language, that goes to his heart.
Nelson Mandela

IELTS essay Being a celebrity - such as famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems? Give reasons for your answe v. 80

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
289 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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