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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Being a celebrity - such as famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems? Give reasons for your answe v.46

Being a celebrity - such as famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems? Give reasons for your answe v. 46
The quality and standard of living in various countries and cities across the globe is becoming unbearable. In my opinion, constant air and environmental pollution are major issues to be noticed. To begin with, increase in the environmental and air pollution are one of the prime issues. In other words, major metropolitan cities are being engulfed with various mechanical vehicles that emit carbon monoxide, which in excess causes depletion of the ozone layer. This result to heavy climate change and global warming, thereby creating an imbalance of ur ecosystem. In addition to this, environmental pollution caused by plastics and nylon bags affects the drainage systems and easy flow of water in the ocean, streams and rivers. For example, in Tokyo the recent typhoon in 2018 damaged over 1000 houses and properties, due to the high littering of plastics in the city. These factors pose heavy threats in the lives of people living in these vicinities. On the other hand, inclination of vehicles using fuel in substitution for electric cars will be beneficial. This action will bring about an increase in the lifespan of citizens living in these cities. This may be due to the fact that electric motor vehicles support renewable energy and will in the long run reduce the amount of carbon monoxide. Additionally, industries and manufacturing firms should be encouraged to support the "going green" initiative and find ways at which they can recycle their products and reduce their usage of fossil fuels. For instance, in the United States, the Coke bottling company has started a campaign to retrieve all the plastic bottles with their brand name marked on it, in an effort to reuse and recycle them into making shoes for the less privileged in Pakistan. In conclusion, increases in the shift from cars that consume fuel to electric vehicles and encouraged the habit of recycling by industries will be of a positive impact.
The quality and standard of living in various countries and
cities
across the globe is becoming unbearable. In my opinion, constant air and environmental pollution are major issues to
be noticed
.

To
begin
with, increase in the environmental and air pollution are one of the prime issues.
In other words
, major metropolitan
cities
are
being engulfed
with various mechanical
vehicles
that emit carbon monoxide, which in excess causes depletion of the ozone layer. This result to heavy climate
change
and global warming, thereby creating an imbalance of
ur
ecosystem.
In addition
to this, environmental pollution caused by plastics and nylon bags affects the drainage systems and easy flow of water in the ocean, streams and rivers.
For example
, in Tokyo the recent typhoon in 2018 damaged over 1000
houses
and properties, due to the high littering of plastics in the city. These factors pose heavy threats in the
lives
of
people
living in these
vicinities
.

On the other hand
, inclination of
vehicles
using fuel in substitution for electric cars will be beneficial. This action will bring about an increase in the lifespan of citizens living in these
cities
. This may be due to the fact that electric motor
vehicles
support renewable energy and will in the long run
reduce
the amount of carbon monoxide.
Additionally
, industries and manufacturing firms should
be encouraged
to support the
"
going green
"
initiative and find ways at which they can recycle their products and
reduce
their usage of fossil fuels.
For instance
, in the United States, the Coke bottling
company
has
started
a campaign to retrieve all the plastic bottles with their brand name marked on it, in an effort to reuse and recycle them into making shoes for the less privileged in Pakistan.

In conclusion
, increases in the shift from cars that consume fuel to electric
vehicles
and encouraged the habit of recycling by industries will be of a
positive
impact.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Being a celebrity - such as famous film star or sports personality - brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems? Give reasons for your answe v. 46

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  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
7.5
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