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These days, many people are interested in buying organic food even though it is oftenmore expensive than conventionally produced food. What are some reasons that people prefer organic food? Do you think it is importantto buy organic food despite the higher v.1

These days, many people are interested in buying organic food even though it is oftenmore expensive than conventionally produced food. What are some reasons that people prefer organic food? Do you think it is importantto buy organic food despite the higher v. 1
Some people say that children have the right to choose their careers freely, therefore, parents should not force their children to pursue a certain job. I partly agree with the idea as it will hinder children's possibility in the future and no ones can take responsibility of one's life but yourself. However, it is understandable that parents want to give some advice on their children's future, wishing for the best for their offspring. Children should be able to choose their occupations freely because it is their own lives and they have the right to do so. Pursuing a desired career encourages children to study harder and gives a sense of independence and responsibility. If they choose their professions by themselves, they will not give up their careers easily, and they will gain more satisfaction from work. On the other hand, if they had been forced to choose an uninterested job, it would be stressful to continue the job and they are more likely to leave the position. Thus, having the freedom to choose one's occupation is highly important. Nonetheless, it is understandable for parents to be worried about their children's future. Parents may direct their children to pursue a secure work, which is financially stable and physically and mentally nonhazardous. For this reason, some parents may against their children's occupational choices such as sexual jobs and construction works. While the freedom of choosing an occupation should be respected, it is reasonable for parents to confront their children if their career choices are associated with risks. In conclusion, although some parents may wish to guide their children to pursue a certain occupation which gives a financial stability and does not involve risks, young people should be able to decide their own careers without restrictions from their parents as no one can be responsible of their lives, and it will increase the sense of independence and responsibility among children.
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children
have the right to
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choose
their
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careers
freely
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parents
should not force their
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children
to pursue a certain
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job
. I partly
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agree
with the
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idea
as it will hinder
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children's
possibility in the future and no ones can take responsibility of one's life
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but
yourself.
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, it is understandable that
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parents
want to
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give
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some
advice on their
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children's
future, wishing for the best for their offspring.

Children should be able to
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choose
their
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occupations
freely
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because
it is their
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own
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lives and
they have the right to do
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so
. Pursuing a desired
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career
encourages
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children
to study harder and
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gives
a sense of independence and responsibility. If they
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choose
their professions by themselves, they will not
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give
up their
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careers
easily
, and they will gain more satisfaction from work.
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, if they had
been forced
to
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choose
an uninterested
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job
, it would be stressful to continue the
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job and
they are more likely to
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leave
the position.
Thus
, having the freedom to
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choose
one's
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occupation
is
highly
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important
.

Nonetheless, it is understandable for
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parents
to
be worried
about their
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children's
future.
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Parents
may direct their
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children
to pursue a secure work, which is
financially
stable and
physically
and mentally nonhazardous.
For this reason
,
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some
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parents
may against their
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children's
occupational choices such as sexual
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jobs
and construction works. While the freedom of choosing an
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occupation
should
be respected
, it is reasonable for
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parents
to confront their
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children
if their
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career
choices
are associated
with
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risks
.

In conclusion
, although
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some
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parents
may wish to guide their
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children
to pursue a certain
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occupation
which
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gives
a financial stability and does not involve
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risks
, young
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people
should be able to decide their
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own
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careers
without restrictions from their
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parents
as no one can be
The usual collocations for "responsible" is "responsible for". Did you mean "responsible for" or "in charge of"?
responsible of
their
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lives
, and it will increase the sense of independence and responsibility among
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children
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay These days, many people are interested in buying organic food even though it is oftenmore expensive than conventionally produced food. What are some reasons that people prefer organic food? Do you think it is importantto buy organic food despite the higher v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
317 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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