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In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.25

In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? v. 25
In today's era, old care homes have been increasing tremendously due to the lack of attachments with each other in the family. Moreover, the union is playing a significant role in providing the compensation to the older people to stay at old care homes and spend their remaining life with others. As per my point of view, I believe that both, ministry and family should be responsible to bear the expense of older people to live there. In a developed country like Britain, state is deducting the taxes and the retirement compensation from an individual from the beginning of his/her earning till he get retired. For instance, a person has served for around 40 years in his whole life till he gets retired and in these 40 years, he has paid a huge amount to state, being an honest tax payer and the ministry also invested the amount further to receive more income irrespective of the expenses. So, I personally believe that government should also revert back in providing retirement benefits in the form of paying for old care homes. On the contrary, Family is equally responsible to pay the expenses as the union is. As no one will happily move to an old age home unless there is a peer pressure by the family members or irresponsibility of taking care of the older people in their home. For example, in modern culture, it has been noticed when children get married, they usually leaves their parents and prefer to live alone. Passing on responsibility to family member might lead to elder people to get what they deserve or if not then paid in proportionate. In the nutshell, equal funding is the best way to give a present to the man who served for himself, his/her family and by paying taxes to the government until he gets retired regardless of anything.
In
today
's era,
old
care
homes
have been increasing
tremendously
due to the lack of attachments with each other in the
family
.
Moreover
, the union is playing a significant role in providing the compensation to the older
people
to stay at
old
care
homes
and spend their remaining life with others. As per my point of view, I believe that both, ministry and
family
should be responsible to bear the expense of older
people
to
live
there.

In a
developed country
like Britain, state is deducting the taxes and the retirement compensation from an individual from the beginning of his/her earning till
he
get
retired.
For instance
, a person has served for around 40 years in his whole life till he
gets
retired and in these 40 years, he has paid a huge amount to state, being an honest tax payer and the ministry
also
invested the amount
further
to receive more income irrespective of the expenses.
So
, I
personally
believe that
government
should
also
revert back
in providing retirement benefits in the form of paying for
old
care
homes.

On the contrary
,
Family
is
equally
responsible to pay the expenses as the union is. As no one will
happily
move
to an
old
age home unless there is a peer pressure by the
family
members or irresponsibility of taking
care
of the older
people
in their home.
For example
, in modern culture, it has
been noticed
when children
get
married, they
usually
leaves
their parents and prefer to
live
alone. Passing on responsibility to
family
member might lead to elder
people
to
get
what they deserve or if not then paid in proportionate.

In the nutshell, equal funding is the best way to give a present to the
man
who served for himself, his/her
family
and by paying taxes to the
government
until he
gets
retired regardless of anything.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? v. 25

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310 words
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