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It is said that adulterated food is the key reason behind Detoriated health of all age goups masses. How far you agree or disagree with it? v.1

It is said that adulterated food is the key reason behind Detoriated health of all age goups masses. How far you agree or disagree with it? v. 1
Food afdulteration is an addition of another substance in food to increase the quantity of food. Apparently modernisation of technology is the most pressing concern to regarding the given topic, Is food adultration the main reason of bad health of all age groups? I completely agree with the statement and shall explore some main reason of this in fourthcoming paragraphs. To begin with, Food adultration is divided into three types. First is intentionally in which food is adultrated for financial benefits. Food is adultrated by preservatives, poisnous substances and colours. For example tea, firstly tea is processed by the addision of chemicals and coloured, this may be the cause of liver damage or heart attack. Moving further, second kind is unintentionally adultrated food. Food is adultrated due to ignorance, wrong packaging, lack of hygenic facilities. It effects the taste, loss of nutritious value. It causes chronic health diseases and vomiting etcetra. At last the third type is natural adultration, in which food is adultrated by pesticides or insecticides and fertilizers. For example wheat in which number of pesticides is evolved in the growth. Which cause cancer, diabetes and other problems related to kidney. To conclude that, adultrated food is a big issue of modern society. Allmost all the foods are adultrated by some substances which may cause various health problems that is very dangerous and may be the reason of death
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Food
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afdulteration
is an addition of another substance in
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food
to increase the quantity of
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food
.
Apparently
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modernisation
of technology is the most pressing concern to regarding the
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given
topic, Is
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food
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adultration
the main reason of
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bad
health of all age groups? I completely
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agree
with the statement and shall explore
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some
main reason of this in
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fourthcoming
paragraphs.

To
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begin
with,
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Food
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adultration
is divided
into three types.
First
is
intentionally
in which
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food
is
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adultrated
for financial benefits.
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Food
is
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adultrated
by preservatives,
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poisnous
substances and
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colours
.
For example
tea,
firstly
tea
is processed
by the
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addision
of chemicals and
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coloured
, this may be the
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cause
of liver damage or heart attack.

Moving
further
, second kind is
unintentionally
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adultrated
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food
.
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Food
is
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adultrated
due to ignorance,
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wrong
packaging, lack of
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hygenic
facilities. It effects the taste, loss of nutritious value. It
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causes
chronic health diseases and vomiting
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etcetra
.

At last the third type is natural
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adultration
, in which
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food
is
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adultrated
by pesticides or insecticides and fertilizers.
For example
wheat in which number of pesticides
is evolved
in the growth. Which
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cause
cancer, diabetes and other problems related to kidney.

To conclude
that,
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adultrated
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food
is a
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big
issue of modern society.
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Allmost
all the
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foods
are
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adultrated
by
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some
substances which may
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cause
various health problems
that is
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very
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dangerous
and may be the reason of
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death
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
16Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21Mistakes

IELTS essay It is said that adulterated food is the key reason behind Detoriated health of all age goups masses. How far you agree or disagree with it? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
230 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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