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It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subject. What are causes? And what will be effects on society? v.7

It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subject. What are causes? And what will be effects on society? v. 7
Science and technology has become the core strength of a nation for many years. However, the number of college students who continue learning such subjects as microbiology, advanced mathematics, and chemistry is decreasing. There are many factors triggering that downward trend and several adverse impacts on society. First and foremost, there are a variety of obstacles that discourage learners from majoring in science. The main one is that these subjects can be challenging for students. As they are abstract ones, they require the learners to possess a good problem-solving and analytical skill. Another limitation is there are insufficient well-trained mentors who can make their lessons interesting enough to catch an attention of their students. Last but not least, experimental facilities are outdated and need modernizing. This leads to a circumstance that the students may find it unsuitable for their research tasks. In terms of consequences, there are several negative impacts that this problem may exert on society. Firstly, there will probably be fewer mathematicians, scientists, and teachers in the future due to the declining number of those who specialize in science and technology at tertiary level. This also gives rise to fewer innovations that are made annually. Secondly, the workforce of in-country scientists may not be optimally made use of. Therefore, the governments have to employ exotic researchers to carry out those works. Lastly, the productivity of argiculture and industry is on the decline. This is because not many people are deeply interested in finding the way to revolutionize argicultural and industrial techniques. In conclusion, the limited number of college students selecting science as their majors is attributable to several factors, and this problem may bring about adverse impacts.
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Science
and technology has become the core strength of a nation for
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many
years.
However
, the number of college
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students
who continue learning such subjects as microbiology, advanced mathematics, and chemistry is decreasing. There are
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many
factors triggering that downward trend and several adverse impacts on society.

First
and foremost, there are a variety of obstacles that discourage learners from majoring in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
science
. The main one is that these subjects can be challenging for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
. As they are abstract ones, they require the learners to possess a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
problem-solving and analytical
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
. Another limitation is there are insufficient well-trained mentors who can
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make
their lessons interesting
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enough
to catch an attention of their
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students
. Last
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but
not least, experimental facilities
are outdated
and need modernizing. This leads to a circumstance that the
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students
may find it unsuitable for their research tasks.

In terms of consequences, there are several
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negative
impacts that this problem may exert on society.
Firstly
, there will
probably
be fewer mathematicians, scientists, and teachers in the future due to the declining number of those who specialize in
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science
and technology at tertiary level. This
also
gives rise to fewer innovations that
are made
annually
.
Secondly
, the workforce of in-country scientists may not be
optimally
made
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use
of.
Therefore
, the
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governments
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have to
employ exotic researchers to carry out those works.
Lastly
, the productivity of
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argiculture
and industry is on the decline. This is
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because
not
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many
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people
are
deeply
interested in finding the way to revolutionize
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argicultural
and industrial techniques.

In conclusion
, the limited number of college
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students
selecting
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science
as their majors is attributable to several factors, and this problem may bring about adverse impacts.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
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IELTS essay It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subject. What are causes? And what will be effects on society? v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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