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It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subject what are the causes? What will be the it’s effects on society? v.1

It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subject what are the causes? What will be the it’s effects on society? v. 1
It is true that the majority of children and schools are choosing subjects such as Commerce and arts and a very less number of children are choosing a science subject only those who have an interest. I believe that taking science subjects are essential because it plays all vital role in the training of future scientific and specialist. To begin, one of the prominent reasons behind the lack of interest in size is that it is very demanding subject because the syllabus of the science curriculum is very long and difficult. Also, these subjects are time consuming and lots of efforts are required in these subjects and nobody wants to do Handwork due to a sedentary lifestyle. Another reason is that most of the children come under the negative peer-pressure, which discourage them to opt these subjects. Moreover, they prefer only those which are opted by their friends. However, there will be many negative effects on society first and foremost, if somehow our country fails to prepare and train scientist and specialist for his future generation, when the time comes they will not have the necessary expertise. They will have to rely on the importation of technology and science which will come at a great price. Nowadays we see this problem in the Third World countries such as African nations that have to rely on foreign companies due to their lack of expert human resources. There are a wide variety of jobs in herely every country so it cannot be said that if someone does not take a science subjects they will encounter many problems in the future to find a job. Most likely they will be able to find a job in other subjects, but finding a job is not the only benefit that taking a science subject has it give the student a general understanding of how things work in our world and the ability to cooperate better with other fields. In Conclusion, I think this problem will cause economical issues for the government in the long run, but there’s no reason for not finding a job and government should be attention to motivate students through different means.
It is true that the majority of children and schools are choosing
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such as Commerce and arts and a
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very
less number of children are choosing a
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science
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subject
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only
those who have an interest. I believe that taking
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science
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subjects
are essential
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because
it plays all vital role in the training of future scientific and specialist.

To
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begin
, one of the prominent reasons behind the lack of interest in size is that it is
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very
demanding
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subject
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because
the syllabus of the
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science
curriculum is
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very
long and difficult.
Also
, these
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subjects
are
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time consuming
and lots of efforts
are required
in these
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subjects
and nobody wants to do Handwork due to a sedentary lifestyle. Another reason is that most of the children
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come
under the
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negative
peer-pressure, which discourage them to opt these
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subjects
.
Moreover
, they prefer
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only
those which
are opted
by their friends.

However
, there will be
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many
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negative
effects on society
first
and foremost, if somehow our country fails to prepare and train scientist and specialist for his future generation, when the time
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comes
they will not have the necessary expertise. They will
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have to
rely on the importation of technology and
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science
which will
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come
at a great price. Nowadays we
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see
this problem in the Third World countries such as African nations that
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have to
rely on foreign
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companies
due to their lack of expert human resources.

There are a wide variety of
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jobs
in
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herely
every country
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it cannot
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that if someone does not take a
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science
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they will encounter
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problems in the future to find a
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. Most likely they will be able to find a
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in other
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,
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but
finding a
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job
is not the
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only
benefit that taking a
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science
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subject
has it give the student a general understanding of how things work in our world and the ability to cooperate better with other fields.

In Conclusion
, I
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think
this problem will cause
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economical
issues for the
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government
in the long run,
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but
there’s no reason for not finding a
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job
and
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government
should be attention to motivate students through
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different
means.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subject what are the causes? What will be the it’s effects on society? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
360 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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