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It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subject. What are the causes? And the effects on society? v.4

It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subject. What are the causes? And the effects on society? v. 4
In recent decades, the number of students enrolling in science-related subjects is becoming inadequate in different parts of the world. Given that this trend leads to a whole host of issues to society, identifying the reasons is key to finding the solutions. There are a number of reasons why science subjects are no longer appealing to students in universities or colleges. First, since those subjects are often demanding and difficult, which requires a lot of diligence as well as a great deal of patience and intelligence, students may find it discouraging to opt for such courses as their majors. In fact, science subjects seem to be less attractive to students compared to economics or business-related subjects partially due to a higher level of commitment and difficulty involved, especially for young people who prefer instant gratification rather than long-term benefits. Second, as employment opportunities available for graduates in the science field are limited and extremely competitive, students are prone to be reluctant to enroll in related majors. This means that although a huge amount of time and effort is spent on these majors, there is no guarantee or little chance for them to land a decent job after graduation. A shortage of science learners can result in some negative effects on society. First, as the number of science students is insignificant, other majors such as business or economics become prevalent, hence the imbalance in the future workforce. In fact, increased competitiveness due to abundant degree holders of the same expertise might push a number of non-science graduates to the verge of unemployment. Second, if fewer students decided to learn science majors, there would be a shortage of science professionals as qualified employees within a nation. This means that a nation, especially those in the developing-nation group, will resort to offshore outsourcing and thus being heavily reliant to more developed nations, which will no doubt hurt the domestic economy in the long-term. In conclusion, the challenging nature of science subjects and limited job prospects are hindrances to students considering entering this field, and serious problems are arising from this situation.
In recent decades, the
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Given
that this trend leads to a whole host of issues to society, identifying the reasons is key to finding the solutions.

There are a
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number
of reasons why
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science
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subjects
are no longer appealing to
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students
in universities or colleges.
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, since those
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subjects
are
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often
demanding and difficult, which requires
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a lot of
diligence
as well
as a great deal of patience and intelligence,
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students
may find it discouraging to opt for such courses as their
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majors
. In fact,
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science
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subjects
seem to be less attractive to
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students
compared to economics or business-related
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subjects
partially
due to a higher level of commitment and difficulty involved,
especially
for young
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people
who prefer instant gratification
rather
than long-term benefits. Second, as employment opportunities available for graduates in the
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science
field
are limited
and
extremely
competitive,
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students
are prone to be reluctant to enroll in related
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majors
. This means that although a huge amount of time and effort
is spent
on these
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majors
, there is no guarantee or
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little
chance for them to land a decent job after graduation.

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science
learners can result in
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some
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negative
effects on society.
First
, as the
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number
of
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science
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students
is insignificant, other
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majors
such as business or economics become prevalent,
hence
the imbalance in the future workforce. In fact, increased competitiveness due to abundant degree holders of the same expertise might push a
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number
of non-science graduates to the verge of unemployment. Second, if fewer
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students
decided to learn
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science
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majors
, there would be a shortage of
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science
professionals as qualified employees within a nation. This means that a nation,
especially
those in the developing-nation group, will resort to offshore outsourcing and
thus
being
heavily
reliant to more developed nations, which will no doubt hurt the domestic economy in the long-term.

In conclusion
, the challenging nature of
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science
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subjects
and limited job prospects are hindrances to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
considering entering this field, and serious problems are arising from this situation.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subject. What are the causes? And the effects on society? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
348 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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