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It is necessary for parents to attend a parenting training course to bring their children up. v.8

It is necessary for parents to attend a parenting training course to bring their children up. v. 8
Raising a child is considered a beautiful experience by parents and newly become parents often find it difficult. Though some parents feel that training classes on parenting will help them nurture their child properly, I believe otherwise. This essay will argue why it is unnecessary to undergo parenting training sessions in order to nurture one’s child. In today’s fast growing world, parents believe that coaching on parenting and professional advice will help them raise their child in a responsible way. The reason parents feel the need of such courses is mainly because of the busy lifestyle and the rise of nuclear families. They do not talk to their parents and get advice nor are they confident enough in their ability to look after their child. For instance, in India, there are certain institutions that provide full-time classes on parenting and their demand is increasing. Distance from other senior members of the family is the main reason so many parents turn to such institutions. However, being a parent is a natural and a wonderful experience which doesn’t require any training. As soon as a couple enters the phase of parenting, the ability to raise their child is naturally born in them. It’s just the confidence that is required and rest is attained gradually. Parenting needs are not same for all and thus a predefined course is insufficient for many couples. To conclude, the parenting ability is naturally inbuilt in every individual and one has to just figure that out in order to raise their child and this has to attain through expertise. not from theoretical courses.
Raising a
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child
is considered
a
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beautiful
experience by
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parents
and
newly
become
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parents
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often
find it difficult. Though
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some
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parents
feel that training classes on
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parenting
will
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help
them nurture their
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child
properly
, I believe
otherwise
. This essay will argue why it is unnecessary to undergo
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parenting
training sessions in order to nurture one’s child.

In
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today
’s
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fast
growing world,
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parents
believe that coaching on
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parenting
and professional advice will
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help
them raise their
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child
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in a responsible way
. The reason
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parents
feel the need of such courses is
mainly
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because
of the busy lifestyle and the rise of nuclear families. They do not talk to their
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parents
and
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get
advice nor are they confident
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enough
in their ability to look after their
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child
.
For instance
, in India, there are certain institutions that provide full-time classes on
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parenting
and their demand is increasing. Distance from other senior members of the family is the main reason
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so
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many
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parents
turn to such institutions.

However
, being a
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parent
is a natural and a wonderful experience which doesn’t require any training. As
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soon
as a couple enters the phase of
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parenting
, the ability to raise their
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child
is
naturally
born in them. It’s
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just
the confidence that
is required
and rest
is attained
gradually
.
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Parenting
needs are not same for all and
thus
a predefined course is insufficient for
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many
couples.

To conclude
, the
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parenting
ability is
naturally
inbuilt in every individual and one
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has to
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just
figure that out in order to raise their
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child
and this
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has to
attain through expertise.
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not
from theoretical courses.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay It is necessary for parents to attend a parenting training course to bring their children up. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
265 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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