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It is necessary for parents to attend parenting training course to bring up their children. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

It is necessary for parents to attend parenting training course to bring up their children. v. 1
There is little room for doubt that parents need to take part in practical parenting classes to raise their offspring. I am of the opinion that the parental involvement in children's life and education is immensely important. With such appropriate knowledge gained from parental courses, they would feel more confident and easier in roaring their young generation. The following essay will further explore the reasons that have shaped my viewpoint. One of the reasons approved is that taking a parental course bring a great deal of benefits beyond parents' expectation. People preparing for mums and dads can obtain many reliable information about children at different developmental stages, nutrients and vaccinations. As well as, well-qualified coaches provide them in-depth knowledge about basic medical training. In other words, parents will be equipped with how to deal with specific and essential emergency situations. So if their future babies had either a high fever or breathing issue, they would know how to give first aid properly. Finally, people who are going to have an infant will learn an enormous number of experience from other parents. Not only they can share useful tips each other, but they can build a network which is all people having the same parental concerns. Another noteworthy cause makes parenting classes more critical ever that is parents' wrong conceptions. If parents just learn parenting tricks and hacks from their previous generation, they will probably make huge mistakes. Some errors can fix by experiencing it, but some even must pay a horrible price. To illustrate this, in Viet Nam, it was reported that hundreds of babies had to be hospitalized in Japanese encephalitis B epidemic. Additionally, with only word of mouth, parents generally misunderstand and pick wrongly out healthy diets and social life for children in a couple of first years. To sum up, it can be oviously seen that parents ought to enroll parental classes to take good care of their offspring. Taking part in basic training courses before parenthood can do wonders for parents and prevent them from unforseen cases. If all parents can attend parenting classes, their knowledge will not only help themselves but also be distributed to other families and friends later on.
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little
room for doubt that
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parents
need to
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take part
in practical
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parenting
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classes
to raise their offspring. I am of the opinion that the
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parental
involvement in children's life and education is
immensely
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important
. With such appropriate knowledge gained from
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parental
courses, they would feel more confident and easier in roaring their young generation. The following essay will
further
explore the reasons that have shaped my viewpoint.

One of the reasons approved is that taking a
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parental
course bring a great deal of benefits beyond parents' expectation.
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People
preparing for
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mums
and dads can obtain
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many reliable information
about children at
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different
developmental stages, nutrients and vaccinations.
As well
as, well-qualified coaches provide them in-depth knowledge about basic medical training. In
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other
words,
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parents
will
be equipped
with how to deal with specific and essential emergency situations.
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So
if their future babies had either a high fever or breathing issue, they would know how to give
first
aid
properly
.
Finally
,
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people
who are going to have an infant will learn an enormous number of experience from
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other
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parents
. Not
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only
they can share useful tips each
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other
,
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but
they can build a network which is all
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people
having the same
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parental
concerns.

Another noteworthy cause
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makes
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parenting
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classes
more critical ever
that is
parents'
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wrong
conceptions. If
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parents
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just
learn
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parenting
tricks and hacks from their previous generation, they will
probably
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make
huge mistakes.
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Some
errors can
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fix
by experiencing it,
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but
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some
even
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must
pay a horrible price. To illustrate this, in
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Viet
Nam, it
was reported
that hundreds of babies had to
be hospitalized
in Japanese encephalitis B epidemic.
Additionally
, with
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only
word of mouth,
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parents
generally
misunderstand and pick
wrongly
out healthy diets and social life for children in a couple of
first
years.

To sum up, it can be
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oviously
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seen
that
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parents
ought to enroll
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parental
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classes
to take
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good
care of their offspring. Taking part in basic training courses
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before
parenthood can do wonders for
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parents
and
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prevent
them from
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unforseen
cases. If all
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parents
can attend
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parenting
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classes
, their knowledge will not
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only
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help
themselves
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but
also
be distributed
to
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other
families and friends later on.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay It is necessary for parents to attend parenting training course to bring up their children. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
366 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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