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It is necessary for parents to attend a parenting training course to bring their children up. Do you agree or disagree. v.4

It is necessary for parents to attend a parenting training course to bring their children up. v. 4
These days in many countries the short term courses related to parenting has been evolved. While some argue that parents should attend the parenting training course for upbringing, their children I, however, disagree with them due to lack of guardians advice and inbuilt the talent of a parent. The main reason why such courses are high in demand in many countries is due to an increase in the rise of the nuclear family and lack of parental or grandparental advice. To elucidate, nowadays, there is a trend of a nuclear family, so many new parents often do not have enough skills and knowledge about how to raise a child, resulting in an increase of such course. Also, such parents do not seek advice from their parents or grandparents as believing that joining such a course will enhance their knowledge. For instance, in India, most new couples who will become parents or became parents are giving priority to joining parenting training course because lack of knowledge about or not taking suggestions and advice from their parents how to raise its infant. Another reason is having an inbuilt talent. It is true that many parents have the talent of raising their child, which evolves as time pass by; due to this, there is no need to join such courses. Also, they do not require any theoretical practice because the practical situation gives more expertise. For example, in Japan, many parents have grown their children without such training as they believe that practical things provide a broader view rather than theoretical or research studies. In conclusion, although many believe that joining such parenting training crash course is more beneficial, in my view, it is not necessary due to firstly, having parental advice and living with parents, and secondly, being to have an inbuilt talent which gradually increases are far more fruitful.
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training
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course
for upbringing, their children I,
however
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due
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advice
and inbuilt the
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talent
of a parent.

The main reason why such
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courses
are high in demand in
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countries is
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due
to an increase in the rise of the nuclear family and lack of parental or
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grandparental
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advice
. To elucidate, nowadays, there is a trend of a nuclear family,
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skills
and knowledge about how to raise a child, resulting in an increase of such
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course
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do not seek
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advice
from their
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parents
or grandparents as believing that joining such a
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course
will enhance their knowledge.
For instance
, in India, most new couples who will become
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or became
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parents
are giving priority to joining
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parenting
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course
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because
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from their
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parents
how to raise its infant.

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talent
. It is true that
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have the
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of raising their child, which evolves as time pass by;
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to this, there is no need to
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, they do not require any theoretical practice
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because
the practical situation gives more expertise.
For example
, in Japan,
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many
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parents
have grown their children without such
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training
as they believe that practical things provide a broader view
rather
than theoretical or research studies.

In conclusion
, although
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many
believe that joining such
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parenting
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training
crash
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course
is more beneficial, in my view, it is not necessary
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due
to
firstly
, having parental
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advice
and living with
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parents
, and
secondly
, being to have an inbuilt
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talent
which
gradually
increases are far more fruitful.
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As a hawk flieth not high with one wing, even so a man reacheth not to excellence with one tongue.
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IELTS essay It is necessary for parents to attend a parenting training course to bring their children up. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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