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It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.4

It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 4
Friends are the most precious gift of humans life. The relationship between the friends only interrupts after death. It is a relation of a soul which has no blood connection. However, some people think that making new friend always a best option than keep old friends. Not surprisingly, the controversy over this issue is overwhelmed. Among this two I prefer first and I will elaborate followings for holding this aspect. First and foremost, friendship is a bond of trust and loyalty and it is the eldest relationship without any genetic connection which lasts forever. Moreover, people can easily express the feeling, problem, experience with a friend without any hesitation. For instance, I have a school friend whom I share my feeling all the time. Besides, she always helps me to take the right decision and always guide me. She deals with my problems like her problems and tries to focus to solve the problem. Recently, I met an accident though I live in a different city where my parents live she helped me a lot. She has taken me to the hospital and also spent the night in the hospital. Moreover, she deals with the doctor and guided me to take medicine through prescription. Most important, due to the meagre of money, she helped me to pay the bill and also supported me mentally and physically. I am so lucky to have this kind of friend and this was possible because she is one of my oldest friend. d Furthermore, sometimes it is easy to make new friends but most difficult is to make friendship last forever. Lasting friendship depends on understanding, mutual benefits and also not involves egoistic problem. For particular, when I staring college I have many friends in the first year and I was good at making new friends but the at the final year I observed that I have only 5-6 friends. Some of this relationship did not last because of a personal problem, confliction, disbelieve and mental instability. However, I also find that this small group of friends is very close to my heart and also I feel comfortable with them. Thus, I think old friendship is most important because they overcome all of the distrust and friction. However, making a new friend is essential for life but keep the old friend is sometimes difficult because of the ups and downs of life. Moreover, when people enter from single life to married life it is difficult to maintain to connect with the old friend. Therefore, people make a new friend for the necessities of life. To recapitulate, friendship is the god gifted relation and people are lucky enough to have this kind of friend. Thereby, for own mental support and make life more enjoyable I think old friends are important of every people' s life.
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Friends
are the most precious gift of humans
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life
. The relationship between the
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friends
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only
interrupts after death. It is a relation of a soul which has no blood connection.
However
,
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some
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people
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think
that making
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new
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friend
always
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a
best option than
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keep
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old
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friends
. Not
surprisingly
, the controversy over this issue
is overwhelmed
. Among this two I prefer
first
and I will elaborate followings for holding this aspect.

First
and foremost,
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friendship
is a bond of trust and loyalty and it is the eldest relationship without any genetic connection which lasts forever.
Moreover
,
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people
can
easily
express the feeling,
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problem
, experience with a
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friend
without any hesitation.
For instance
, I have a school
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friend
whom I share my feeling all the time.
Besides
, she always
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helps
me to take the right decision and always guide me. She deals with my
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problems
like her
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problems
and tries to focus to solve the
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problem
. Recently, I met an accident though I
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live
in a
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different
city where my parents
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live
she
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helped
me a lot. She has taken me to the hospital and
also
spent the night in the hospital.
Moreover
, she deals with the doctor and guided me to take medicine through prescription. Most
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important
, due to
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the meagre of
money, she
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helped
me to pay the bill and
also
supported me mentally and
physically
. I am
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so
lucky to have this kind of
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friend
and this was possible
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because
she is one of
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my


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oldest
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friend
.
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d


Furthermore
,
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sometimes
it is easy to
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make
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new
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friends
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but
most difficult is to
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make
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friendship
last forever. Lasting
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friendship
depends on understanding, mutual benefits and
also
not involves egoistic
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problem
. For particular, when
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I staring
college I have
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friends
in the
first
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year and
I was
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at making
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new
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friends
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but
the at the final year I observed that I have
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only
5-6
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friends
.
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Some
of this relationship did not last
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of a personal
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, confliction, disbelieve and mental instability.
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, I
also
find that this
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small
group of
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friends
is
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very
close to my heart and
also
I feel comfortable with them.
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, I
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think
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old
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friendship
is most
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important
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because
they overcome
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all of the
distrust and friction.

However
, making a
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new
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friend
is essential for
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life
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but
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keep
the
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old
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is
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sometimes
difficult
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of the ups and downs of
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.
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, when
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people
enter from single
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to married
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it is difficult to maintain to connect with the
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old
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friend
.
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,
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people
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make
a
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new
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friend
for the necessities of life.

To recapitulate,
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friendship
is the god gifted relation and
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people
are lucky
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enough
to have this kind of
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friend
. Thereby, for
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own
mental support and
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make
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life
more enjoyable I
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think
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old
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are
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20Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
57Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 4

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
470 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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