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It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.1

It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1
Since the beginning of the 21st century, people have used different methods of communication, either in their social lives, or in their business. Some people believe that using technology in communication has become more common that traditional face to face meeting, while others argue that face to face meeting is essential and can not be replaced by the advancement in technologies. This essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using technology for communication. Using technologies either in social or business communication has many advantages. This using enables people to communicate with each others, regardless the far distances. For example, people who live in China can talk to people who reside in Jordan without any difficulties, so this development can enable people performing their businesses throughout the world very easily. Therefore, it seems clear that adopting advancement technologies in communication has a great benefit of social and business life. On the other, some people think that using these technologies could affect badly on family relationships. Due to these technologies, family members stopped communicating regularly, and the family gathering has become rare. Recent research, which has conducted in the USA, has shown that 95% of family members prefer to communicate with their families using Skype or Tango rather than face to face meeting. These people are unaware of the fact that using these technologies are invented for the people who live at far distances to help them to communicate easily. Thus, communication using technological devices has a great benefit. In conclusion, this essay discussed the positive and negative sides of using technologies in communication. In my opinion, I believe that these technologies have a positive impact on both the family members' relationships and on the business.
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different
methods of
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communication
, either in their social
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lives
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business
.
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people
believe that using
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technology
in
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communication
has become more common that traditional
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face
to
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face
meeting, while others argue that
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face
to
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meeting is essential and can not
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by the advancement in
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technologies
. This essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using
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technology
for communication.

Using
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technologies
either in social or
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business
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communication
has
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many
advantages. This using enables
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people
to communicate with each
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others
, regardless the far distances.
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,
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people
who
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live
in China can talk to
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people
who reside in Jordan without any difficulties,
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so
this development can enable
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people
performing their
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businesses
throughout the world
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.
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that adopting advancement
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in
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has a great benefit of social and
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business
life.

On the other,
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some
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relationships. Due to these
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technologies
,
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family
members
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stopped
communicating
regularly
, and the
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family
gathering has become rare. Recent research, which has conducted in the USA, has shown that 95% of
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family
members prefer to communicate with their
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families
using Skype or Tango
rather
than
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face
to
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face
meeting. These
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people
are unaware of the fact that using these
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technologies
are invented
for the
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people
who
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live
at far distances to
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help
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.
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,
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using technological devices has a great benefit.

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, this essay discussed the
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positive
and
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sides of using
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in
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communication
. In my opinion, I believe that these
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technologies
have a
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positive
impact on both the
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family
members' relationships and on the
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business
.
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IELTS essay It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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