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Make Textbook List Available Earlier Students always have to wait until the beginning of the semester to find out which textbooks they will need for their new courses But since a lot of students register early for their courses I think that the list for e v.1

Make Textbook List Available Earlier Students always have to wait until the beginning of the semester to find out which textbooks they will need for their new courses But since a lot of students register early for their courses I think that the list for e v. 1
There are plenty profits coming from travelling abroad, such as generating high revenue or creating worldwide connection. Nevertheless, opponents have pointed out that international tourism creates prejudice and more tensions between people from different nationalities. In this essay I intend to delve into the causes of this situation and suggest some ways to alleviate the problem. There are various causes can be put forward to elaborated why foreign tourists become biased and cold instead of receptive and indulgent. First and foremost, it is understandable that, without cultural knowledge, foreigners may unknowingly show disrespect to local tradition, which then offend local people. For example, wearing formal clothes is considered sacred in Vietnam temples; however, this may not hold any value for the tourists and leads to uncomfortable feelings for both sides. Secondly, whether we want to admit or not, stereotyping about countries and places is spread out widely by the media, which explains why foreigners have more preconceived negative opinions about their destinations. To illustrate, the dwellers of economically developed countries consider the other people inferior and develop the bad attitude in both local people and tourists. For instance, in 1980s, the Americans tourists usually deny Vietnamese fish sauce as they think it is dirty. This created many conflicts later when Vietnam airline wants to add this sauce in their menu on flight for Vietnamese. Although the causes may sound horrible, there are many measures we can apply to fix the problems. To begin with, tour operators have to take the onus of guiding tourists about the main things of local culture. In other words, foreigners should adopt the broader outlook and must expand their vision to enjoy their travelling. Secondly, in order to eliminate stereotyping, local interactions should be promoted by encouraging home stays so that the differences between reality and media portrayal can come to the surface. Finally, governments and schools should conduct the seminars to promote the secular and world friendly outlook which then helps everyone to be tolerant enough to respect the differences. In conclusion, international travel does have negative effects on people because of misunderstand the differences in culture as well as strong stereotypes from the media. However, they are mostly objective causes which can effectively omit by raising awareness for travellers through many channels like tour operators, local services, governments and school.
There are
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profits coming from travelling abroad, such as generating high revenue or creating worldwide connection.
Nevertheless
, opponents have pointed out that international tourism creates prejudice and more tensions between
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people
from
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different
nationalities. In this essay I intend to delve into the
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causes
of this situation and suggest
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some
ways to alleviate the problem.

There are various
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causes
can
be put
forward to elaborated why foreign
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tourists
become biased and
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cold
instead
of receptive and indulgent.
First
and foremost, it is understandable that, without cultural knowledge, foreigners may
unknowingly
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show
disrespect to
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local
tradition, which then offend
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local
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people
.
For example
, wearing formal clothes
is considered
sacred in Vietnam temples;
however
, this may not hold any value for the
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tourists
and leads to uncomfortable feelings for both sides.

Secondly
, whether we want to admit or not, stereotyping about countries and places
is spread
out
widely
by the media, which
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explains
why foreigners have more preconceived
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negative
opinions about their destinations. To illustrate, the dwellers of
economically
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developed countries
consider the other
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people
inferior and develop the
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bad
attitude in both
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local
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people
and
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tourists
.
For instance
,
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in 1980s
, the Americans
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tourists
usually
deny Vietnamese fish sauce as they
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think
it is dirty. This created
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many
conflicts later when Vietnam airline wants to
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add
this sauce in their menu on flight for Vietnamese.

Although the
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causes
may sound horrible, there are
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many
measures we can apply to
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fix
the problems. To
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begin
with, tour operators
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have to
take the onus of guiding
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tourists
about the main things of
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local
culture.
In other words
, foreigners should adopt the broader outlook and
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must
expand their vision to enjoy their travelling.
Secondly
, in order to eliminate stereotyping,
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local
interactions should
be promoted
by encouraging home stays
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so
that the differences between reality and media portrayal can
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come
to the surface.
Finally
,
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governments
and schools should conduct the seminars to promote the secular and world friendly outlook which then
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helps
everyone to be tolerant
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enough
to respect the differences.

In conclusion
, international travel does have
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negative
effects on
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people
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because
of misunderstand the differences in culture
as well
as strong stereotypes from the media.
However
, they are
mostly
objective
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causes
which can
effectively
omit by raising awareness for
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travellers
through
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many
channels like tour operators,
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local
services,
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governments
and school.
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IELTS essay Make Textbook List Available Earlier Students always have to wait until the beginning of the semester to find out which textbooks they will need for their new courses But since a lot of students register early for their courses I think that the list for e v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
387 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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